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Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Instead of key terms, include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
Direct quotes should have page numbers (APA style).
Consider including more examples/case studies.
Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.
The chapter could be improved by getting assistance with grammar.
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Overall, this is a strong chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
To streamline this chapter to within the word count, I suggest removing the longish quote towards the beginning and abbreviating some of the background theory.
Consider adding discussion about and a link to the delay discounting chapter.
A range of relevant theory is well selected, described, and explained.
Perhaps more examples of how each theory applies to financial risk-taking would be helpful.
Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Ideally, there would be more psychological research specifically about financial risk-taking that could be reviewed.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
Learning features
Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
Excellent use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links more links to related book chapters within the main body helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Excellent use of images.
Very good use of tables. Add APA style table captions.
Good use of feature boxes.
Basic use of quizzes.
Basic use of case studies or examples.
Grammar
The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). I suggest getting some professional assistance to sort this out - it will be worth it because there is a lot of good content that is currently undermined by the incompleteness of many sentences.
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An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
The presentation is well structured.
Theory is well covered; research is not well covered.
General theory is provided, but there is a lack of theory about specific emotional biases. What are the emotional biases that influence risky financial decision-making?
Some practical examples are included.
Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
A Conclusion slide is presented. But what are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives?
