Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Rewards, punishments, and social cooperation

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Hi- be sure to use APA intext referencing and not footnotes. This is outlined on assignment. Everything else looks great! well done :)

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Interesting topic! Social cooperation is a very broad piece of terminology, so it may be useful to consider studies involving specific demographics. This particular paper investigated external motivation as a causation of [behaviour in childhood]. Rewards and punishments as a predictor of social cooperation in children appears to be a popular amongst research so consider that when choosing articles. Furthermore the psychological models in this paper may be valuable to consider when writing your own. My recommendation for the direction of this paper would be to research and explain the topic in relation to different populations, especially as the effect of rewards/punishments tends to vary between childhood, adulthood and the elderly. I think it would be interesting to highlight these differences/similarities throughout your research. For further research, this journal article may be of interest. The meta-analysis explores the effectiveness of costs and rewards on social cooperation, interestingly the study suggests a lack of significance between rewards and punishments as incentive to cooperate, this may contradict a number of other findings. U3175218 (discusscontribs) 11:57, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

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Hi mate, this is all really good stuff and a great start to the assessment. One thing I think you could delve into is the biology of rewards, punishments and social cooperation. Maybe explain what parts of the brain effect our desire for rewards and our avoidance of punishments. Even delving into an explanation of how people with damaged brains might not fully be able to cope in a typical situation as most people. In addition, you could look at what effects bodily chemicals may have on our perception of rewards, punishment and social cooperation. U3175664 (discusscontribs) 13:36, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:42, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Title/sub-title fixed to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self
  2. Add link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with no links to evidence.
  2. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  2. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  4. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overview - Consider adding focus questions.
  2. Remove or adapt generic template content.
  3. Partial development of key points.
  4. Relatively few citations.
  5. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  6. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  7. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. OK.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use correct italicisation
    3. Use the new recommended format for dois -
    4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. Very good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:42, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a well developed chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Useful Overview; could be improved by adding a case study.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. The chapter can be improved by being more selective about the theory discussed. For example, classical conditioning isn't related to the topic.
  2. That aside, relevant theories are subsequently well described, and applied.

Research[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter provides a good overview of relevant research.
  2. Some relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Great to see the meta-analysis cited. To improve, provide more details about this study since it provides some of the best evidence about the topic. Any other relevant meta-analyses?
  3. When describing important research findings, consider including the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is reasonably well structured, but avoid sections with only one sub-section (e.g, 3.1).
  3. Learning features
    1. Good use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Basic use of feature boxes.
    6. Basic use of quizzes. Increase width.
    7. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
    8. Some use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
  5. APA style
    1. Citations use correct APA style.
    2. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Remove retrieval dates.
      2. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      3. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~3 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:52, 13 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.


Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Takes a little while to get going - about half-way before addressing theory/research.
  2. Operant conditioning image is difficult to read; other slides are easy to read.
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced.
  4. The font size (except for the operant conditioning slide) is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Punishment is misspelt in video title.
  2. Use the full title and sub-title in the video title and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality sounded a bit tinny, with the occasional static glitch - review microphone set-up.
  4. Image sources are not provided - need more details.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:38, 16 November 2019 (UTC)