Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Psilocybin and emotion

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The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Authorship details fixed on book list of chapers

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with direct links to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Overview should have no sub-headings.
  2. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overview - Consider adding focus questions.
  2. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  3. Good development of key points for most section, with relevant citations.
  4. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  6. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
    1. Caption uses APA style.
  2. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.
  4. Consider increasing image size from default to make it more readable.

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct italicisation
    2. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Moved to bottom
    2. Added bullet points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:09, 29 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more about the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
    2. "See x." is not a sentence; integrate in full sentences (e.g., see X).
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of embedded interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    4. Excellent use of images.
    5. Excellent use of tables, although Table 2 and 3 probably don't represent sufficient information to warrant a table.
    6. Excellent use of feature boxes.
    7. Excellent use of quizzes.
  4. Grammar
    1. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
  5. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    2. Citations use correct APA style.
    3. References use correct APA style.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~9 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:14, 24 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality was OK - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone.
  4. Visual display quality was very good.
  5. Image sources are provided.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  7. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  9. A brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:23, 24 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]