Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Mania and motivation

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:58, 29 August 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Good A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section. User page Created, with brief description about self and link to book chapter Social contribution 1 summarised with indirect link to evidence Use a numbered list Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Use bullet-points for focus questions Whilst distinguishing between EM and IM might offer one useful theoretical perspective, I'm not sure that structuring the entire chapter around this distinction will give the best representation of what is know about mania and motivation in psychological academic literature. Also consider how other aspects of motivation which are particular to mania may be incorporated. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider including more examples/case studies. Image Provided, with an APA style caption Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References DSM reference is incomplete. For full APA style: Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also Good External links Identify more specific resources

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:44, 26 September 2019 (UTC)

Mania Characteristics

Interesting read, it would help if you went into about the characteristics of mania. Specifically going into detail about Grandiosity and how it affects motivation. Grandiosity is a key characterisation of mania or hypomania in mood disorders like Bipolar disorder, it is when the individual experiences Grandiose delusions which makes them believe larger-than-life feelings of superiority and invincibility. When an individual experiences this it can exaggerate their sense of importance, power, knowledge, or identity. An example would be them believing they are the best at a video game, and how they will become the best player and earn money through it, and they can't be shaken from this idea. It would be really interesting to speak about how this can motivate people to achieve their goals, and whether it would help or hinder this achievement. --U3175262 (discuss • contribs) 02:19, 6 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Case study examples could be helpful. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. A balanced, critical perspective is evident. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1. No use of embedded interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. No use of images. Good use of tables. Basic use of feature boxes. Excellent use of quizzes. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and correct use of that vs. who. Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Biploar). APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures and tables Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation. See new doi format. Social contribution ~5 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:28, 24 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an very good presentation. This presentation makes creative use of powtoon. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is fun and interesting to watch and listen to. Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by moving images. Production quality Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was OK. Visual display quality was very good. Image sources and their copyright status are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:39, 24 November 2019 (UTC)