Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Guilt

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Suggestions[edit source]

  • Hi I would suggest to look into Sigmund Freud Psychoanalysis theory on id, ego and superego, hopefully this theory can help with understanding a few aspects of guilt

--U3160483 (discusscontribs) 04:40, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I am looking at how culture influences shame, guilt, and pride. It is very interesting to see how culture influences on how you feel guilty and shame. So, I would suggest to have a look at how different cultures have different types of guilt theories? Best of luck --User:KiiraOo --KiiraOo (discusscontribs) 00:43, 2 September 2019 (UTC)U3119404 10:42, 2 September 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I found your topic to be very interesting, however, the case study was a bit confusing. For improvement, editing the case study can help in showing it's purpose in a clear manner. Good luck on your book chapter! --U3161960 (discusscontribs) 09:23, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:42, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments[edit source]

This page is so jam packed with great information! You've really done a great job with this page. Sometimes if I do something that makes someone feel bad, instead of recognising that I feel guilty straight away, I get really angry and upset and I take it out on them. And then later on I realise why I'm actually upset :) Guilt is such a strange emotion, but I'm really glad I learned so much more about it today. I also like that you talked a little bit about White Guilt, I feel like that's an upcoming topic that should be researched more!


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Capitalisation of the title and content of the sub-title have been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self
  2. Add link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. One summarised but no link to evidence
  2. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Structure is promising, but follows some made up questions rather than the assigned sub-title focus.
  2. Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Reduce overcapitalisation
  2. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
  3. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  4. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  6. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption does not use APA style (italicise Figure X).
  3. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use correct italicisation
    3. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    4. Alphabetical order

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Include info in brackets
  2. External links
    1. Reformat - see other chapters for examples

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:42, 28 September 2019 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Overview - clear, simple, to the point, includes focus questions. To improve, consider adding a case study and/or image.
  3. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter.
  4. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    3. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
  3. Learning features
    1. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    2. No use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    3. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    4. Basic use of images.
    5. No use of tables.
    6. Basic use of feature boxes.
    7. No use of quizzes.
    8. Basic use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1].
    3. Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
    4. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
    5. Abbreviations
      1. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
  5. Proofreading
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Survivor Guilt).
  6. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    3. Figures and tables
      1. Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., no full stop).
    4. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al.").
      2. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~ 4 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:17, 13 November 2019 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  2. Balanced (considers pros and cons of guilt).
  3. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  4. Consider including more examples.
  5. A Conclusion slide is presented - to improve, add practical, take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is easy to follow.
  2. The presentation uses text with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  5. The font size could be larger to make it easier to read.
  6. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality is OK - it is probably recorded using an on-board microphone (initially some background noise can be heard) - review microphone set-up.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  5. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  6. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  7. A basic written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:10, 15 November 2019 (UTC)