Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Evolutionary perspective of happiness

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Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:39, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments[edit source]

Hi there! I looked into an evolutionary emotion theory and thought it might be helpful with your topic. This link has a basic definition is you are interested: https://www.verywellmind.com/theories-of-emotion-2795717 U3178428 (discusscontribs) 11:17, 20 October 2019 (UTC)


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Capitalisation and content of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self
  2. Add link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with indirect links to evidence.
  2. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Reconsider use of "Darwinian"; topic focuses on "evolutionary"
  2. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  3. Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Perhaps consider the argument that humans aren't designed to be happy and the pursuit of happiness is a cultural fabrication based on a "cult of the self".
  2. Basic development of key points for most sections, with relevant citations.
  3. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  4. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  6. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html - instead of login/paywall links

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Good
  2. External links
    1. Not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:39, 28 September 2019 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world phenomenon.
  2. This chapter is well under the maximum word count, so it could go into more depth.
  3. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theory is described and explained.
  2. Could be covered in more depth.

Research[edit source]

  1. Some relevant research is discussed.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. Use active rather than passive voice[1].
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview, with clearer focus question(s).
  1. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  2. Learning features
    1. No embedded use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. No use of feature boxes.
    6. No use of quizzes.
    7. No use of case studies or examples.
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
  4. Spelling
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    2. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
  5. Proofreading
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Western Society).
  6. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    2. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    3. Citations use correct APA style.
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.
      3. See new doi format.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:20, 22 November 2019 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of powtoon.
  3. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. A Conclusion slide is presented.
  5. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives?

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Good intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  5. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  6. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio recording quality was very good.
  4. Visual display quality was excellent.
  5. Image sources are provided.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  7. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  9. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:29, 22 November 2019 (UTC)