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Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Perhaps consider the argument that humans aren't designed to be happy and the pursuit of happiness is a cultural fabrication based on a "cult of the self".
Basic development of key points for most sections, with relevant citations.
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
Consider including more examples/case studies.
Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview, with clearer focus question(s).
Layout
Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Learning features
No embedded use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of images.
No use of tables.
No use of feature boxes.
No use of quizzes.
No use of case studies or examples.
Grammar
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
Spelling
Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
Proofreading
Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Western Society).
APA style
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
Figures and tables
Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
Citations use correct APA style.
References are not in full APA style. For example:
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Good intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
