Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Boredom and emotion

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:18, 24 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Good Capitalisation of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section. User page Created, basic Have added link to book chapter Social contribution Excellent Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. Remove sub-headings from Overview Adjust headings to sentence capitalisation (see comment above) Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Use bullet-points (per Tutorial 1) Excellent range of precursor theories Include key citations Some sections are empty Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image None provided References Only provide references for citations. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources Use bullet-points External links Rename links so that they are more user friendly and include the source in brackets (see Tutorial 1)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:18, 24 September 2019 (UTC)

Comment

I enjoyed reading this chapter, it has been well thought out. I enjoyed reading about the different theories. Well done! --U3158296 (discuss • contribs) 23:53, 18 October 2019 (UTC)

Have to agree with the comment above! Really cool. I know it's getting close to the submission date so it may be too late for a suggestion to be of use. But just in-case, It could be cool to look at how mindfulness changes the experience and consequences of boredom! Good luck! --Joshgrain (discuss • contribs) 06:10, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Feedback

Just thought I'd mention that I updated your quiz so that the grammar was constant throughout. I added capitalisation to the lower two questions as only the first two had them :)--U3144248 (discuss • contribs) 21:04, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter that successfully uses psychological theory to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. A stronger emphasis on reviewing research could make the chapter stronger. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. More examples would be helpful. Research Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links. Good use of images. No use of tables. Very good use of feature boxes. Good use of quizzes. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Good use of case studies or examples. Use bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1 (e.g., See also). Grammar Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Select up to a maximum top three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point). Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Social contribution ~24 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence. Thanks for your significant contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:55, 14 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). Quite theory heavy. Consider abbreviating and including more examples. Include the sub-title on the Title slide and in the video name, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. Consider putting the focus questions (good) on a second slide. The visual presentation could be improved by splitting many of the slides into several slides each, with larger font and image sizes to make them easier to read. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s), however the take-messages are quite vague. Communication The presentation is easy to follow. Reasonably well paced. Sometimes longer pauses could be left between sentences. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. A lot of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images in a basic way. Production quality Add sub-title to video title and opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was good. Image sources and their copyright status are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is/not provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Excellent presentation of references and figure licensing details.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:55, 15 November 2019 (UTC)