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Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
Perhaps consider making the emphasis on specific theories more obvious in the choice of headings.
Factors of influence could be stronger if it was tied to theory.
Hi! Really like your plan so far, i found a reference that discusses the role of childhood maltreatment and body disatisfaction that I thought would fit in perfectly with your chapter. While the article focuses on body disatisfaction and smartphone use I thought it could be a possible direction for you to take in the 'age' subheading as a possible risk factor? Good luck!
--U3174136 (discuss • contribs) 06:59, 12 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Hey, I really like what you've got so far, it would be a great topic to look at different case studies and maybe comparisons of risk factors for different age groups and genders. Good luck! --U3162204 (discuss • contribs) 10:30, 15 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Hi! I really enjoyed reading your chapter on this topic. I especially enjoyed your case studies and think that they are very helpful in understanding the more difficult or complicated concepts.--U3144248 (discuss • contribs) 21:15, 20 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and some research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The chapter could be improved by providing a more detailed review of research and improving the quality of written, mainly grammar and, in particular, the use of commas.
The Overview is too general; make it more specific to the topic. The focus questions are more focused, but could also be improved by being more refined. The case study is helpful.
The Conclusion is excellent.
For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
Some relevant theory is considered. Also consider social comparison theory and perhaps, for treatment, acceptance and commitment therapy.
There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., Maslow's hierarchy of needs). Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research.
Use more up to date WHO references.
Did you consult James (1884), Maslow (1943) etc.? If not, they should be a secondary citation.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.
Layout
Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
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The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the opening slide - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Audio recording quality was a bit quiet and faded out a bit in one place - review microphone set-up. Keyboard clicks can be heard, so perhaps an onboard rather than external microphone was used.
Image sources (general) are provided.
A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
A link to the book chapter is provided.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided.
