Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Betrayal and emotion

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Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:23, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

@U3100177: Just drawing your attention to the suggestion above. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:23, 1 September 2019 (UTC)


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Content of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with indirect links to evidence.
  2. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Promising 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic.
  2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  4. Be careful to avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overview - Consider adding focus questions.
  2. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
  3. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  4. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:29, 29 September 2019 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. The chapter is limited by its poor quality of written expression due to problematic grammar.
  3. This chapter is over the maximum word count.
  4. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. Excellent case studies.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is poor, particularly the grammar. Getting professional assistance is recommended.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Basic use of embedded interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Good use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Excellent use of feature boxes.
    6. Very good use of quizzes.
    7. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
    8. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and correct use of that vs. who.
    3. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
  5. Spelling
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    2. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
  6. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    2. Replace double spaces with single spaces.
  7. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    2. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    3. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~2 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:30, 24 November 2019 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an good presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. The presentation is well structured.
  2. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  3. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
  4. Overall, there is too much content presented too quickly. Slow down.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  2. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  3. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  5. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was a bit quiet - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone.
  3. Visual display quality was good.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  5. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  6. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  7. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:38, 24 November 2019 (UTC)