Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Guilt

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Suggestion[edit]

Hey, nice work on starting your chapter, I love the image! Upon doing a little research on guilt I came across this article, I think it's a great introduction to the study of guilt and also mentions Freud and other theorists: https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Arlene_Stillwell/publication/15034528_Guilt_An_Interpersonal_Approach/links/57618aa808aeeada5bc4fd77/Guilt-An-Interpersonal-Approach.pdf Hope it's helpful! --U3160212 (discusscontribs) 08:05, 24 August 2018 (UTC)

@U3160212: Hi, thank you so much for the article suggestion! It has been extremely useful in the development of my book chapter! --U3097480 (discusscontribs) 12:02, 2 September 2018 (UTC)

Minor edit[edit]

Hi again, I've checked back on your book chapter and it looks like its going along really well, I've just changed your reference list to have appropriate italicisation! I would also recommend adding the DOI hyperlinks to your reference list. https://www.doi.org/ using this system is the easiest! Good job! --U3160212 (discusscontribs) 05:13, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Suggestion[edit]

Hi, hope everything is going well with your book chapter. I stumbled upon this study on Sciencemag online magazine that was describing the influences of guilt on individuals. While the study focuses more on the cognitive aspects of guilt, I think there could be some great cognitive/emotional implications drawn out from the study: https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/ajpy.12223 Good luck with your chapter! :) --Kelly.ng988 (discusscontribs) 1:09, 13 October 2018 (UTC)

Denial of Guilt[edit]

Hey Leanna, Am loving your chapter so far! Was doing some research on the topic of guilt and thought it might be an interesting avenue to look into the denial of guilt and the impacts that has on emotion. I found a really interesting article about guilt and denial in relation to the post-war lives of Nazi perpetrators which may be of interest to you. https://academic-oup-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ahr/article/119/3/1000/12275 kind regards Zoe-

Heading casing[edit]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:14, 30 September 2018 (UTC)

Minor edit[edit]

Hi there, I have just changed


Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via Canvas. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit]

  1. Excellent

Social contribution[edit]

  1. Exce

Section headings[edit]

  1. Very good
  2. May need to be selective about which theories/how much theory to cover, so that three key questions get similar coverage

Key points[edit]

  1. Consider the possibility of including one or more case studies/examples
  2. How guilt can be managed + the Conclusion look to be the least well developed, but are arguably the most important sections in terms of the book chapter being readily applicable to a general audience

Image[edit]

  1. Well done

References[edit]

  1. Promising
  2. Use APA style
  3. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Resources[edit]

  1. See also - very good; I've removed generic links (e.g., to emotion and motivation); keep these links topic-focused. Include links to relevant Wikipedia articles too.
  2. External links - select these for an international audience

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:14, 30 September 2018 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a promising, but insufficient chapter.
  2. The chapter would be much stronger if more of it was independently written. There are far too many direct quotes which serve to demonstrate virtually nothing about your knowledge or capacity to meet the learning outcomes for the unit. To this end, all quoted content was ignored for marking purposes.
  3. The amount of focus on survivor guilt is not justified. The focus of the chapter should be on synthesising psychological theory and research about three key questions: "Why do we experience guilt, what are its consequences, and how can it be managed?" Survivor guilt may reasonably be used as an example to help address these three questions, but a major focus is not warranted.
  4. Much of the material for this chapter is poorly sourced. Consult and cite primary rather than secondary sources. Identify and use the top peer-reviewed theory and research on the topic. There is over-reliance on a small number of primary sources (e.g., Baumeister, 1994).
  5. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. Some theory is covered (mainly evolutionary theory), but the chapter lacks cogent, theory-based answers to the three focus questions: "Why do we experience guilt, what are its consequences, and how can it be managed?"
  2. Table 1 provides a promising overview, and some or all of these theories could be used as the major organising device for the chapter, but this is only partly done, at best.
  3. I didn't understand the relevance of the prisoner's dilemma and the stag hunt in relation to addressing the focus questions: "Why do we experience guilt, what are its consequences, and how can it be managed?". The connections need to be made more explicit or, alternatively, other theory/research may be more relevant.

Research[edit]

  1. Basic, sufficient coverage of some relevant research.
  2. Ideally, integrate the review of research into discussion of theory.
  3. Some statements are unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format.
    2. The chapter benefited from a reasonably developed Overview and Conclusion.
    3. Some statements could be written more clearly (e.g., see the [say what?] tags).
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    3. Good use of examples.
    4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    2. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    3. Basic use of images. The captions could be used to help more strongly reinforce one or more key points being made in the text. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text.
    4. Basic use of a quiz.
    5. Good use of case study examples, however these could be improved by making stronger connections to at least one of the three focus questions.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    2. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    3. Check and correct use of commas.
    4. Use serial commas.
    5. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
  5. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    2. Use APA style for Table captions.
    3. Citations
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    4. References are not in full APA style
      1. A mixture of APA style referencing and wiki-style referencing is used - use one or the other, not both


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Most of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation is reasonably well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). To improve, include the sub-title in the title slide and name of the video and add a Conclusion slide with take-home messages that address each of the three focus questions in the sub-title.
  3. The presentation was under the maximum time limit, so perhaps an example could have been added to help illustrate the ideas.

Communication[edit]

  1. The presentation provides text-based slides with narration, including one table.
  2. Visual communication could be improved by presenting less text per slide and using larger font.
  3. Also consider using diagrams or images to help illustrate key points.

Production quality[edit]

  1. Audio recording quality was reasonably good. There is some distortion towards the end.
  2. Video recording quality was excellent.
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:57, 13 November 2018 (UTC)