Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Gambling addiction motivation

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Added template[edit]

Hi Lauren, I added the template for your chapter and also adjusted the heading accordingly, I hope this gives you a start on developing your chapter, it sounds interesting! --U3160212 (discusscontribs) 01:56, 28 August 2018 (UTC)

Information Contribution[edit]

Hi Lauren, really interesting topic! There's a journal article that looks at the motivational model of mood alteration and how this underlies gambling addiction [Stewart, S. H., Zack, M., Collins, P., & Klein, R. M. (2008). Subtyping Pathological Gamblers on the Basis of Affective Motivations for Gambling: Relations to Gambling Problems, Drinking Problems and Affective Motivations for Drinking. Psychology of Addictive Behaviours, 22(2), 257-268. doi:10.1037/0893-164X.22.2.257]. It is a slightly older article and also analyses the influence of substance use alongside gambling but it was quite informative in understanding the underlying motivations of gambling. There's also a really interesting TED talk regarding a personal experience of gambling [1] that might be cool for your 'See Also' section! --U3143109 (discusscontribs) 08:26, 2 September 2018 (UTC)

Hey! Make sure you in-text reference every claim that you make, especially if it is not common knowledge, or else you may be marked down. Really interesting topice! --U3158984 (discusscontribs) 05:49, 15 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi Lauren! I'm really enjoying your topic so far, you have covered it really well. I was thinking as I was reading it, that perhaps Mindfulness could be used in conjunction with CBT as a treatment measure so looked further into this. I found a few articles that might be of interest to you about this. Basically, it seems as though Mindfulness may be a good treatment style in the future but more clinical research is needed. Still an interesting approach though! :) --Emily Ewart (discusscontribs) 01:50, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi, this chapter was a good read. Upon reading it, my only suggestion would be that it seems a little redundant to say how the DSM 5 describes gambling addiction and then add how it was finally added to the DSM 5 in the next sentence. You could probably combine those two sentences into one or just mention that it's the first non drug related addition to substance disorders in its own sentence. Otherwise I enjoyed reading it and it flowed well. Good luck - U3144461 17:25, 21 October 2018


Hi, I'm Simon working on the behavioural automaticity section of the 2018 chapter. I think the topic I've covered relates to the addiction in general and how the brain works. Here are some topics I read over which might help you: - Automaticity of cognitive biases in addictive behaviours: Further evidence with gamblers. -,contains,Automaticity%20of%20cognitive%20biases%20in%20addictive%20behaviours:%20Further%20evidence%20with%20gamblers&mode=Basic - Attentional bias and addictive behaviour: automaticity in a gambling‐specific modified Stroop task -,contains,Attentional%20bias%20and%20addictive%20behaviour:%20automaticity%20in%20a%20gambling%E2%80%90specific%20modified%20Stroop%20task&sortby=rank&offset=0 - Compulsive features in behavioural addictions: the case of pathological gambling -,contains,Compulsive%20features%20in%20behavioural%20addictions:%20the%20case%20of%20pathological%20gambling&sortby=rank&offset=0

Hi Lauren, Really good article! I capitalised one of the words that needed one. Also the in text referencing I think may be incorrect in the case study example. I found this site that may be useful for a Ted talk. All the best! --Kunal Kumar - University of Canberra (discusscontribs) 23:47, 20 October 2018 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit]

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:08, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via Canvas. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Good

User page[edit]

  1. Very good

Social contribution[edit]

  1. Good, but links don't go directly to evidence of contribution
  2. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings[edit]

  1. Write for an international audience - e.g. "Prevalence of Gambling in Australia" won't be that relevant/interesting, although a case study (e.g., of Australian strategies being used to manage gambling) could be relevant to the topic and interesting to an audience. Similarly, don't over-Australianise the section on types of gambling - might be better off here with a brief summary and pointing to something like Gambling types (Wikipedia) for more info, and then concentrating on the core topic, which is "What motivates gambling addiction and what can be done about it?"
  2. In other words, the important material (after the Overview) for this chapter really starts with "Motives to gamble".

Key points[edit]

  1. Minimal development of plan for key content in "Motives to gamble", what can be done about, Conclusion etc.


  1. Good


  1. Good
  2. Use APA style


  1. See also - Good
  2. External links - Internationalise

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:08, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Article and comments[edit]

Hey Lauren!

You have a great topic development! I particularly like how you have addressed the different types of gambling. I see you have addressed some psycho-social factors that contribute to gambling motivation. I came across this thesis on gambling, which provides an overall literature review on gambling addiction and evaluates the topic in terms of psychological, biological and social theories. You may be able to search specific articles that this thesis sites and explore further.

I hope this helps with your 'motives to gamble section' - I think by covering bio-psycho-social factors that this is all encompassing, and would ensure you don't miss any important motivations.

Good luck with it!

--Ju3141393 (discusscontribs) 10:37, 11 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback: Very interesting topic, I look forward to seeing the end result! Just a suggestion, maybe you could create a sub-heading regarding 'Addiction' and define what addiction is, and look at the psychological theories for addiction, and maybe even add a case study or youtube video to illustrate this. That will help tie your three main ideas together (gambling, addiction and motivation) as separate concepts, and then you can talk about their effects on each other (how motivation impacts addiction, and how this consequently impacts gambling). I hope this makes sense and gives you some ideas to help further develop your chapter. Good luck --Abbsu3163507 (discusscontribs) 00:57, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

This chapter is looking very interesting thus far. I think that in your 'What can be done section' it may be helpful to address preventative measures. I think it would be increasing to see what the individual can do, what the organisations that provides the gambling services can do and mental health professionals can do. I really like your quiz at the end. You external links, espcially to Lifeline, I think are really important. Great work TaylorMal (discusscontribs) 01:14, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

Hey Lauren, I just italicised your references for youǃ I realised I needed to fix mine and thought others may have forgotten too. I bolded references I thought were incorrect- you may want to have a lookǃ Good luck with the rest of it. --Caroline Gangotena (discusscontribs) 11:01, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

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  1. Overall, this is a very well constructed chapter that demonstrates excellent knowledge of theory, relevant research, and practical applications.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.


  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, explained, and contrasted.


  1. Research is generally well considered and described.
  2. However, some statements are unreferenced (see the [factual?] tags).
  3. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just Australian audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    4. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    5. Not all the topic development comments were addressed.
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    3. Otherwise, well structured.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent case study in the Overview.
    2. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    3. Images, tables, and quizzes are well used.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Check and correct use of commas.
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    3. Use serial commas.
  5. APA style
    1. Use APA style for Table captions (e.g., caption goes above a table).
    2. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    3. Citations
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    4. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation.
      2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.



  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of Powtoon animation.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  4. Maybe add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.


  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. Well paced.
  3. Great use of an example/case study.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.

Production quality[edit]

  1. The full chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  5. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:56, 16 November 2018 (UTC)