Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Curiosity

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Comments[edit source]

Good start on your overview. I can see where you are going with your book chapter. Would love to see your critique on the meaning of the saying 'Curiosity killed the cat'. --Lucy Hanrahan (discusscontribs) 23:17, 1 September 2018 (UTC)Lucy Hanrahan Hi there! I like the different aspects you're going for in this book chapter. To help you with your set up here is a link to wikiversity book chapter stucture https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Template:Motivation_and_emotion/Book_chapter_structure just pop this on to your page and it will set things up nicely for you! Good luck :) --MaddieCarleton (discusscontribs) 23:03, 16 October 2018 (UTC) 17/10/2018

Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. OK

User page[edit source]

  1. OK

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised on user page

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Basic development
  2. Avoid having sections with only one subsection - either have no subsections or two or more subsections

Key points[edit source]

  1. Limited development
  2. Key points not provided for all proposed sections
  3. Development of Conclusion missing - this is the most important section

Image[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. Use APA style for figure captions and explain how the image helps to illustrate one or more key point in the text

References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. Use APA style

Resources[edit source]

  1. Insufficient
  2. See also - Also include links to related Wikiversity book chapters
  3. External links - Include info about source/destination in brackets after the hyperlink - see example

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:28, 1 October 2018 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a rich, interesting, but somewhat "raw" chapter.
  2. The chapter probably goes beyond its scope and seems to run out of word count (e.g., there is no Conclusion), so consider more selectivity about what/how to include.
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Many relevant theoretical elements are described and explained.
  2. The chapter could be improved by being more selective about which theory to cover.
  3. The chapter could be improved by providing a synthesis of theory (e.g., in a Conclusion).

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. The chapter could be improved by providing more integration of research and theory.
  3. The chapter could be improved by providing a synthesis of theory (e.g., in a Conclusion).
  4. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. In general, the chapter is well-written.
    1. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Very basic use of images.
    3. Basic use of tables.
    4. No use of feature boxes.
    5. No use of quizzes.
    6. Some use of examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
  5. APA style
    1. Use APA style for Figure captions. See example.
    2. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
    3. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    4. Reference formatting could be improved by being more consistent.


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an promising presentation that makes effective use of simple tools.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Some coverage of theory.
  2. Lack of coverage of research.
  3. Good use of examples.
  4. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. Well paced. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Video recording quality was excellent.
  3. Audio recording included some background noise - review microphone set up.
  4. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is not provided.
  7. A brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:57, 29 November 2018 (UTC)