Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Arousal and sporting performance

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Suggestion[edit source]

Hi there, this is such an interesting topic! I would suggest changing your figure captions to APA, and I also found this article which my help you, its on emotions and sport performance, specifically happiness, hope and anger Good luck! --U3160212 (discusscontribs) 10:36, 10 October 2018 (UTC)

Your topic looks very interesting, I look forward to seeing the finished product. Just a suggestion for how your page is set up, you can place images on either the left, ride or centre of the page. All you have to do is click the image whilst in edit mode, select edit, advanced and then position. Just thought this might be a helpful suggestion to help break up your page a bit and make it look more visually appeasing. --Abbsu3163507 (discusscontribs) 06:04, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Simple 2-level structure - not too little or not too much - and focused on the topic. Could expand if wanted.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Image[edit source]

  1. Use APA style
  2. Use caption to connect each image to one or more key points in text

References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. Use APA style
  3. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. See also - also consider links to relevant past book chapters

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:52, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

Referencing[edit source]

This seems like a fantastic topic. Although, you aren't far into the development, you seem in need of some improvements on your APA formatting. This is a link to UC's referencing page: . This is always very helpful for me. I also suggest that you limit your links in the 'Also See' section, as it will drain your word count. Try to just use links that are essential to your page or add valuable information that the reader may be seeking. Keep up the great work TaylorMal (discusscontribs)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:20, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a sufficient chapter. The main areas for improvement are in the quality of written expression, particularly grammar, and in providing more detailed of relevant research.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are reasonably well selected, described, and explained.
  2. Basic dictionary definitions are quoted, rather than independently phrased descriptions based on primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  3. Some useful examples are provided.

Research[edit source]

  1. Research coverage is light - citations and basic descriptions are provided, but there is a lack of detail and critical consideration.
  2. Did you consult sources such as Yerkes and Dodson (1908)? If not, this should be a secondary citation.
  3. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. It is better to use primary, peer-reviewed references for definitions of constructs than dictionaries.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    3. Some sentences are overly long; consider splitting them into shorter, separate sentences.
    4. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
    5. Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    2. Check and make correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    3. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    4. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Minimal use.
    2. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    3. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    4. Basic use of images.
    5. Basic use of tables.
    6. No use of feature boxes.
    7. No use of quizzes.
    8. Limited use of case studies or examples.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    3. Use serial commas.
    4. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
  5. APA style
    1. Direct quotes need quotation marks and page numbers.
    2. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    3. Citations
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
      2. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
    4. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and make correct use of formatting such as capitalisation, spacing, bold

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:20, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section.
  2. Reasonably well selected, however the presentation felt a little rushed, so consider being more selective about what to cover.
  3. What are the practical, take-home messages?

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation simple use of mainly text-based slides with narrated audio.
  2. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. A link from the book chapter was not provided.
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  4. Add a written description of the presentation in the description field.
  5. Add acknowledgement of image sources used in the presentation.
  6. A link to the book chapter is not provided.
  7. The references are not displayed for long enough to be read or easily paused.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:31, 26 November 2018 (UTC)