Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Anxiety neurobiology

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Hi, looks like a solid start! On the parts where you discuss the areas of the brain assoicated with Anxiety it might be helpful also to include information about the hypothalamus. The hypothalamus regualtes the pituitary galnds to realise hormones and is the control center for the Autonomic Nervous System. It might be helpful to include information in the way neurons and hormones target the adrenal cortex to realise stress hormones like epinephrine and cortisol in a "fight or flight" response, which seems consistant with your theme on anxity. Such a great topic! Keep it up! --U3160678 (discusscontribs) 11:28, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

Hey Liam, here is an article that can help you get started in this really interesting topic! https://onlinelibrary-wiley-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/doi/full/10.1002/da.21957 --U3158984 (discusscontribs) 22:00, 1 September 2018 (UTC)


Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit]

  1. Very good

User page[edit]

  1. Minimal
  2. Include link to the book chapter you are working on

Social contribution[edit]

  1. None summarised on user page

Section headings[edit]

  1. Clear 2-level structure - not too little or not too much - and focused on the topic

Key points[edit]

  1. Well developed
  2. The key litmus test for any content is "to what extent is this helping to answer the question: "What are the neurobiological components of anxiety?". If content is not answering this question, then remove or summarise briefly and link to Wikiversity/Wikipedia resources with more info.

Image[edit]

  1. OK
  2. To improve - expand figure captions to explain how they relate to one or more key points in the text

References[edit]

  1. Good
  2. Use APA style

Resources[edit]

  1. Good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:01, 2 October 2018 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit]

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, there is a promising chapter, but there is too much general background information (summarise and link to more info) and too little focus on the specific topic, particularly in the early stages of the chapter (e.g., there is no Overview explaining the problem and focus of the chapter). For example, brain imaging techniques are discussed, but instead links could be provided to more info, whilst the focus could be on what is known about the chapter topic based on brain imaging research. Similar, there is no conclusion section providing a synthesis of theory and research as an answer to the sub-title question, with an emphasis on take-away messages.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.

Theory[edit]

  1. Some relevant theories are described, but these tend to somewhat broad/general. Nevertheless, a reasonable understanding is evident.
  2. There is too much general theoretical material about emotion. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic.

Research[edit]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. However, the most relevant research could be discussed in more detail, with less detail about less relevant research.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit]

  1. Written expression
    1. Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is reasonably well structured, but lacks standard sections such as Overview and Conclusion (the most important sections).
  3. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are well used.
    2. Good use of images.
    3. No use of tables.
    4. No use of feature boxes.
    5. No use of quizzes.
    6. No use of case studies.
    7. No use of images, tables, feature boxes, quizzes, case studies, or examples.
  4. APA style
    1. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    2. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and make correct use of italicisation.
      2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:49, 29 November 2018 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.
  2. Address an international (rather than Australian) audience.

Structure and content[edit]

  1. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section (e.g., too much emphasis on mechanics of brain imaging, rather than addressing the topic).
  2. The focus seems to be on brain structures (as opposed to, say, neural pathways, neurotransmitters etc.) - a bigger picture perspective could be more effective.
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  5. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Communication[edit]

  1. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  2. Well paced. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided.
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit]

  1. The full chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. Audio and video recording quality was excellent.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  5. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.
  6. No written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:56, 29 November 2018 (UTC)