Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Online dating motivation and gender

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Comments[edit source]

Hi Georgia - I hope you don't mind, but I jumped in and added the code for hanging indent in your references section. To add more references within the formatting, just put them in before the double curly brackets at the end (}}). Hope your writing is going well :)--MMMRH9416 (discusscontribs) 04:45, 4 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi there! I noticed you did not have any book chapters added under "see also" just yet so I went ahead and found you two chapters from 2014 that you might find relevant to your topic! hope they help! --U3133258 (discusscontribs) 03:15, 16 October 2017 (UTC) 2.14PM 16 October 2017

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:19, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC[edit source]

  1. Minimal at time of topic development submission; is now almost correct - remove first letter word capitalisation - just capitalise the first letter of the title and subtitle to fit with the book/wiki style

User page[edit source]

  1. Created, but basic at time of submission with no links
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None at time of topic development submission
  2. 1 good link and summary provided since; note that the link can be more direct by viewing the page history and comparing the page before and after your contribution, and then using this comparison link for the summary link to evidence

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Remove bold from headings - use standard heading styles
  2. At time of submission, very limited section heading development
  3. Based on current content, it is not clear that the best relevant psychological theories and research has been identified to help address the question. Be wary of defaulting to generic, well-known motivational theory such as Maslow's hierarchy of needs - instead, look more deeply into the theory/research literature about the phenomenon of interest - gender differences in relationship motivation and how this might/might not apply to motivations in online dating

Key points[edit source]

  1. None of note provided at time of submission
  2. Based on current content, keep expanding the Motivations to Use Online Dating section because it contains the most relevant content in terms of addressing the topic and marking criteria so far

Image[edit source]

  1. Included
  2. Too small read easily - consider expanding the default image size
  3. Provide an APA style caption that explains how the image reinforces key points being made in text
  4. It is not clear to me how Maslow's hierarchy of needs is relevant to the topic

References[edit source]

  1. None provided at time of submission
  2. Do not hyperlink the whole citation - only hyperlink the doi address
  3. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
  4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources[edit source]

  1. None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:19, 15 October 2017 (UTC)

Image edits[edit source]

Hey there, Hope you mange to finish in time! I edited some of the image sizes and i also added an image to help break up the block of writing. Good Luck! --Maddison Frost (discusscontribs) 11:05, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

Direct copy from user page[edit source]

Hey Georgia, I realised all the way back at the start of chapter development I left a comment on your user page not here, so here it is:

Hey Georgia - Following on from from the aforementioned references, I found this article which is published this year, and i believe it provides a well-rounded examination of sexting in adolescents: Van Ouytsel, J., Van Gool, E., Walrave, M., Ponnet, K., & Peeters, E. (2017;2016;). Sexting: Adolescents' perceptions of the applications used for, motives for, and consequences of sexting. Journal of Youth Studies, 20(4), 446-470. doi:10.1080/13676261.2016.1241865. I hope this can act as a foundation for your Book Chapter :) --U3144362 (discusscontribs) 10:14, 20 August 2017 (UTC)U3144362 02:50 17 August 2017

--U3144362 (discusscontribs) 13:15, 22 October 2017 (UTC) u3144362 12:15 AM


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a problematic chapter because it doesn't use the best available psychological science about the motivations for online dating and how they differ by gender. Instead the chapter covers a lot of general motivational theory and discusses how this related to relationship motivations between genders, but not online dating motivation.
  2. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world problem.
  3. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
  4. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. A broad range of general motivational theory is covered. It would be better to focus on a smaller range of theory which is more directly related to online dating and gender differences. For example, I'm not sure why Maslow's hierarchy of needs has been included.
  2. The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.

Research[edit source]

  1. Almost no research about motivations for online dating and how these differ by gender is covered by the chapter. This is a major omission.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Wording and casing for the title and subtitle was adjusted to fit the book style
    2. To improve the chapter, include more original writing and reduce the amount of direct quoting
    3. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
    4. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
  2. Layout
    1. Headings were removed from the Tables. The Tables would be more useful if they were more directly related to the chapter topic.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
    2. Basic use of images - captions need to more clearly connect with text and the chapter topic.
    3. No use of quizzes or case studies.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - e.g., see the [grammar?] tags.
  5. APA style
    1. Use APA style for Table and Figure captions
    2. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help relate the figure to the content of the chapter
    3. Check and correct APA style for direct quotes - use double quote marks, include page numbers etc.
    4. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct italicisation
      2. Add spaces between author initials
      3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Content issues raised in relation to the book chapter are also relevant (i.e., addressing the question) also apply.
  2. Very well structured and organised.
  3. Interesting, with examples.

Communication[edit source]

  1. Excellent audio and video communication of ideas.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. Very well scripted, edited, produced.
  2. The title and sub-title should match the book chapter.
  3. Excellent acknowledgement of image sources.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:14, 23 November 2017 (UTC)