Hey there! I've found this list of guidelines for long term care of people living with dementia. It has some rules, regulations, and important things to consider when planning an environmental design for the individual I think this is actually a really important topic of development. Good luck :) http://ro.uow.edu.au/cgi/viewcontent.cgi?article=1675&context=hbspapers
(Telgey (discuss • contribs) 09:53, 31 August 2017 (UTC) = Telgey 19:52, 31 August 2017 (UTC))
Hi there - I've noticed that in your 'treatment' section, you've stated that there are no known treatments for dementia, before going on to list a few interventions. I was thinking it may be clearer to say that there is no known 'cure' - as there are multiple treatments, many of which you have shown you are planning to discuss. I know this is just a rough outline, and you were probably planning to change that, but I thought I'd mention it just in case. Any feedback you have on my work so far would also be appreciated. Happy writing!--MMMRH9416 (discuss • contribs) 04:59, 4 October 2017 (UTC)
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Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development
Types of dementia, diagnosis, treatment etc. sections are not needed - avoid providing too much background/generic material. Instead briefly summarise background concepts (e.g. a table for types of dementia and key characteristics could works) and provide wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter, using the best available theory and research.
Include an introductory case study in the Overview to help engage readers
Overall, this in minimalistic chapter that lacks review of sufficient theory and research and connection to motivation.
The chapter could be improved by reducing the amount of general content (e.g., about dementia) by summarising and providing links to other relevant wiki resources, and then providing more detail material about the topic i.e., environmental design for PLWD.
The Overview is too detailed - instead outline what the problem is and the approach of the chapter.
The Conclusion could be improved by giving it more teeth - what are the practical, take-home messages about designing environments for PLWD? This chapter shouldn't just be about designing institutional environments, but also home environment modifications for those in the earlier stages of dementia. There are some environment audit tools available that offer practical assessment and modification guides.
There is a lack of integration of motivation or emotion theory.
This chapter could be improved by incorporating the work of Richard Fleming from University of Wollongong (e.g., http://ro.uow.edu.au/cgi/viewcontent.cgi?article=1675&context=hbspapers)- a hint in this direction was offered in the topic development feedback to search Wikiversity for related resources that were developed in conjunction with Richard's research program.
When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
Reduce content on what is dementia, dementia treatment etc. Increase focus on environmental design for helping to improve the lives of PLWD. The actual addressing of the topic only starts of 1:45. Expand the material between 1:45 and 2:30.
Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.