Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Awe and well-being

Feedback on topic development

Looks fabulous Sonia!! --U3135539 (discuss • contribs) 07:25, 23 August 2017 (UTC)

A fantastic overview into how you will structure your page. very informative and well outlined.--Tasha92 (discuss • contribs) 01:58, 28 August 2017 (UTC)

Hi Sonia, loving the book chapter thus far, I noticed you left a comment under the dark side of awe regarding if you should put this into a box and I think this is a great ida! it will break the text up effectively - great job! --U3144362 (discuss • contribs) 03:55, 28 August 2017 (UTC)u3144362 1:55PM

Thank you all for your feedback - much appreciated! Please let me know if you have any other suggestions as we start writing them up properly. I'll keep an eye on your pages too - please let me know if I can help with anything in particular. --u3122707 (discuss • contribs) 02:28, 30 August 2017 (UTC)

We just used this topic development as an excellent example for the virtual tutorial. ---- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:26, 30 August 2017 (UTC)

Eudaimonic perspective

Sonia, fantastic outline and beginning of your chapter. Given the topic, a theory that seems to be missing is Maslow's (1970) hierarchy of needs. This will come under "How does awe influence well-being?", and if using the model, can provide incredible evidence for how awe affects well-being and other behaviours. Self-actualisation, the ultimate peak of experience, is specific to this topic. For example, as a an individual reaches self-actualisation, they experience greater awareness of self, their well-being, and elevation/connection towards a greater whole. Awe is a significant component of this model as it is, ultimately, what finalises the peak experience. It combines all emotional, psychological, social and physical well-beings, something that you have looked into much detail already. Here is the study that reminded me of this self-actualising model (Huta and Ryan, 2009). It should take you straight to the pdf version of the study so you can read the whole thing. The same study also looks at hedonia and eudaimonia (something you could also look at more thoroughly) individually and how they both influence different social and well-being behaviours. Although they focused primarily on the individual characteristics of each, their conclusion states that they both overlap to create a complete picture of well-being. They go as far to say that the combination of both creates the "greatest well-being". Another small idea is how eudiamonia and awe are related to the "search for the meaning of life". Essentially, do these two components of well-being result in a greater understanding of the meaning of life, therefore greater levels of well-being? This may be a bit too philosophical for the chapter but may provide an interesting fact or two if you have fact/quiz sections. This brief abstract by Danvers, O'Neil, and Shiota (2016) outlines the studies goals for answering this question. I haven't managed to locate the full study yet, but if I do, I shall include it here if you are interested. Best of luck. --U3117126 (discuss • contribs) 09:24, 27 August 2017 (UTC)

Thank you so much for your insightful comments and suggestions U3117126! You have given me lots to think about. Made me wonder if I should focus less on what aspects of well-being are influenced (emotional, psychological etc), and more on how experiencing awe supports well-being (e.g. through eudaimonic motivation). The studies you provided look like they might be very helpful - thank you! And great idea to put the less 'scientific' (but perhaps more interesting) stuff in a fact box. Best of luck to you too. --u3122707 (discuss • contribs) 01:35, 28 August 2017 (UTC)

Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC Perfect User page Created Used effectively Social contribution Wow - very significant and well organised, easy to follow Section headings Very well organised - not too complex Question structure for top-level headings provide a strong and interesting focus Key points Excellent coverage in terms of breadth and relevance, with clear emphasis on theory, supplemented by relevant research There are plenty of examples and practical suggestions, so more isn't really needed - but another one to note might be getting an astronaut's eye perspective of the earth - or the the "zoom out" perspective effect in becoming aware of the size of the universe - and also the "zoom in" perspective in becoming aware of the micro-structures of matter. Image Well captioned Consider increasing image sizes (has already been done between topic development and current work) References Fantastic Resources See also Excellent External links Very good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:46, 10 October 2017 (UTC)

Feedback on final chapter

Hi, I read you're chapter and have a few comments: 1. I think you could reword the definition section on what is awe and what is wellbeing - the sentences don't flow very well and sound incomplete because they each start with "awe is..." or "flourishing is..". I think if you rework this section, your chapter would be a lot stronger. 2. Table 1 overlaps figure 2 which makes it very hard to read and makes it look messy. Moving the table or the picture would be a lot better, but both are relevant and should be kept 3. If you have the words you should add more to the empirical research section just to really hit home what awe and wellbeing is and how its useful Overall, I think the chapter is good and the theory based section is really good. Hope this has helped - u3115549 --U3115549 (discuss • contribs) 06:48, 8 October 2017 (UTC)

Thank you u3115549. These are great points, I will definitely address them. Good to know about the overlap because on my computer it looks fine! If you or anyone else knows how to lock positions to prevent this please let me know? Thanks again, really appreciate your feedback --u3122707 (discuss • contribs) 07:02, 8 October 2017 (UTC)

Sonia, this is looking awesome (sorry, terrible pun). I think a strength of your article is that it is so user-friendly. The language is approachable, the visuals are great illustrators, I especially felt the diagrams you included enhanced my understanding of the topic. Great use of the overview effect as a case example (I'm working on resilience in space, and have taken a look at your article after your suggestion). I also read that we have an understanding of the overview effect. We don't, however, know how this will extrapolate once astronauts are capable of longer space flight, and they see the earth as just a distant star, and have to grasp the insignificance of life within the greater universe. Not sure if that helps with the article, it just struck me as an interesting intersection of our topics/future research. Check out section 1.4.5 if this interests you. --U3154661 (discuss • contribs) 01:58, 18 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi Just did a proofread and have made a few direct edits, primarily small. Feel free to change them back if you dont agree! It looks great! Theres maybe a couple of spots where you could cull a sentence or two. I didnt want to do that so maybe call me if you want and I can talk through it. There was one where I changed US to united states as it just didnt seem right with the abbreviation and a coma but then I didnt change them later so you might want to put it back! It made me think about an experience I had in Cambodia at Angkor Wat. I arrived before dawn in the pitch black just myself and a guide. He took me in the back way (which in hindsight was probably dangerous but I didnt experience fear) It was completely silent, not even the sound of birds and even though I could not see anything I had this profound sense of something unspeakably large and great looming above me. As the sun slowly rose and the light changed, a little more was unveiled moment by moment until in bright sunlight I was able to paradoxically focus on the intricate storytelling carvings that wrap around the entire complex. It was an experience I remember as surreal and it still makes my heart beat a little faster! Feel free to use it as a case study although you probably dont have enough words!--U3135539 (discuss • contribs) 10:39, 18 October 2017 (UTC)

Wow, thank you so much for sharing your story Alysum! Gave me goosebumps, I too experienced awe at Angkor Wat even without the sunrise experience - that must have been truly incredible! Thank you for the edits too, brilliant. Would love to get your thoughts about cutting a few sentences, think it is overly wordy but I'm a bit sick of editing! --u3122707 (discuss • contribs) 10:28, 18 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi Sonia, just noticed one of your references had an author that wasn't capitalised, so I fixed that up for you. You can see the change I made here Amazing Chapter! You've given me great ideas on how to combine theoretical underpinnings and research examples in single sections witihin my chapter where I previously had things seperate and a bit disjointed! --Alume (discuss • contribs) 06:15, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a top-notch chapter that exhibits all of the hoped-for features, with a strong foundation in theory and research, which are well-integrated, along with lots of practical examples and ideas which can be put into practice in everyday life. Excellent use is made of the wiki environment, including links, images, and tables. Theory Theories are very well described and explained. Research Research is well selected and explained, with critical consideration. Effect sizes are included for key studies. Written expression Written expression is excellent, with a very well developed Overview and Conclusion. Spelling, grammar and proofreading are excellent. APA style is excellent.

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Overall Overall, ... Structure and content Well selected content - didn't try to cover too much, but did include key theory, some research, and plenty of examples Structured into Overview, Body, and Conclusion Communication Clearly communicated Combination of image and text, with font that was easily readable Audio was well place and easy to follow Production quality Well produced simple tools Image sources appropriately licensed and acknowledged Good use of meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:37, 24 November 2017 (UTC)