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Author: Paolo Artoni[a][i]  

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  1. ↑ Maria Luigia Hospital
  1. ↑ artoni@ospedalemarialuigia.it

This is the pre-publication public peer review for the article Body image disturbance in eating disorders

Plagiarism check[edit source]

Pass. Report from the WMF copyvios tool flagged some false positives (not regarded as plagiarism) due to common stock phrases. Totaled 23.1% with 'violation unlikely' with regard to plagiarism. Please see the results here [1] Rwatson1955 (discuss • contribs)

Few things I noticed[edit source]

  1. Should be made clear not all of those who have BID have an eating disorder.
  2. Another set of causes is also verbal, such as fat shaming, seeing images on tv or print of skinny girls in skin-tight clothes, getting the most expensive new perfume and this list can go on.
  3. I would put the definition as your second section (however) quite a few sections keep hitting on the definition so I'd recommend re-reading and doing an outline for better placement and to remove redundancy. 2600:8801:CA05:EF00:4037:41C6:FFFB:4904 (discuss) 12:16, 31 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    @ I thank the reviewer for their valuable advice. Following their recommendations, I've updated the highlighted sections and I feel the text has significantly improved. The reviewer's detailed input and efforts were crucial in refining the document. Srobodao84 (discuss • contribs) 00:23, 9 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

First peer review[edit source]


Review by Eric A. Youngstrom, PhD , University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill, and Helping Give Away Psychological Science
These assessment comments were submitted on , and refer to this previous version of the article

This is a well-written paper that accomplishes several things:

It provides a good introduction to the topic of body-image disturbance in eating disorders. It relies heavily on a balanced combination of review articles (Clinical Psychology Review), open access peer reviewed publications (e.g., PLoS One, Frontiers in Psychiatry), high impact traditional peer-reviewed journals (e.g., Psychiatry Research, British Journal of Psychiatry, Journal of Consulting and Clinical Psychology), and specialty journals relevant to the topic (e.g., Body Image, International Journal of Eating Disorders).

It also incorporates work by investigators with long-standing federally funded programs of research in the area (e.g., Pamela Keel, Eric Stice…). Significant government funding is often regarded as a marker of quality, as the grant proposal itself goes through rigorous peer review, the competition for funding is fierce, and then the results and paper itself need to pass through a second filter of peer review.

The technical craft and the aesthetics of the article are good, too. The article uses headings and subheadings, includes a picture of Hilde Bruch, and includes a brief selection of relevant scales with references for the primary publication of each.

What follows are small recommendations to further enhance the utility and impact of the article:

  • Please update the literature review to add any significant, relevant papers that have been published while this has been under peer review. The unfortunately lengthy review process is no fault of the author’s, and this recommendation is not intended to be onerous – just add any that seem relevant so that readers will not judge the article as already being dated.
  • Consider adding two sections at the end:
    • Limitations and future directions. This is a common section in articles, and sometimes both limitations (of the extant literature) and future directions (new work that would address these shortcomings) is bundled into a single paragraph.
    • General conclusion or implications: A summary of the “take home” message from the article. This often is the second or third most-read portion of an article (behind the abstract and possibly “the lead” in a Wikipedia article).
  • Also consider adding an “External Links” section with links to copies of some of the recommended measures and .gov or .org sites with relevant information or resources.

Again, these are intended to be straightforward and pragmatic enhancements that will increase the utility and impact of the article.

Frankly, this is an exceptionally strong contribution, and it should not only be accepted for publication, but – particularly with some of the suggested additions – it will be an exemplar that will be helpful to others who prepare articles for consideration at the WikiJournals. Indeed, the audience that I have in mind as I write the review is larger than just the author team, particularly as I call out strengths of the article.

Thank you for an excellent submission, and for your patience with the review process. All journals in which I am involved have been going through challenges finding reviewers post-COVID. It is endemic, and not at all a reflection of the quality of the submitted work.

Kudos!

OhanaUnitedTalk page 21:08, 11 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much for your kind words and constructive feedback on the article. I greatly appreciate your detailed assessment and the positive remarks. I must admit, I wasn't aware of the recent updates on Wikipedia, and I'm grateful you brought this to my attention.
Regarding the revisions, I would like to inquire if it's permissible to make the suggested amendments directly on the article in the "page" section, as one would typically do for a normal edit on Wikipedia. This approach would allow for a more streamlined and efficient updating process.
I will soon start working on writing the recommended sections, including "Limitations and Future Directions" and the general conclusion or implications. These additions, as you rightly pointed out, will significantly enhance the article's utility and impact.
Once again, thank you for your excellent suggestions and for taking the time to review the work. Your guidance is immensely valuable.
Best regards, Srobodao84 (discuss • contribs) 09:55, 8 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Rwatson1955, please see the author's reply. OhanaUnitedTalk page 03:10, 11 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Second peer review[edit source]


Review by Ariayana Nicole Harrell , UNC and Helping Give Away Psychological Science
These assessment comments were submitted on , and refer to this previous version of the article

Strengths: concise and broad in the beginning. Touches on major relevancies within the field. Areas for improvement: discussion sections and future directions to push new research in this area.

Summary

This article examines the multiple components of BID well and what treatments are available. It gives a brief, concise introduction to BID and its effects on one’s mental health. However, the article also could be enhanced by touched on in the introduction and more data in the individual sections. Lastly, a discussion section describing the importance of BID would give the key takeaways and show the reason why this needs to be studied further. Overall, the introduction and discussion can touch on more key points on the importance of BID and the trajectory it can have on one’s mental and physical health.

Introduction
  • Mention how body image disturbance and eating disorders can be related to a distorted view of one’s self and their physical appearance:
    • Those who have been diagnosed with anorexia tend to have a symptom of a distorted body image, leading them to extreme and unhealthy eating behaviors (Dalhoff et. al, 2019).
  • Include how body disturbance can be comorbid and affect other areas of mental health broadly (i.e., depression, self harm, etc):
    • Phillips et. al, 2005 found that comorbidity rates between body dysmorphic disorder and other psychopathologies such as major depression, bipolar, dysthymia, psychotic disorders, anxiety disorders, panic disorder, obsessive-compulsive disorder, posttraumatic stress disorder, substance use, and other eating disorders were generally very high.
  • Talk about the onset of body disturbance and where it is most likely to begin in adolescence. Additionally, talking about prevalence within the United States would be great to include. If there is information about transgender and LGBTIA+ community, that would be valuable.
    • Onset is vague. It starts as early as 2 when children start to recognize their gender (leading to the reproduction of social norms), recognizing their relationship with their parents, and socializing and comparing themselves to others (Hosseini and Padhy 2023).
  • Add more about the prevalence among different age and gender groups. Body dissatisfaction can be as high as 71% in adolescence, 35%-81% in girls and from 16%-55% in boys in developed countries; 40%-70% of uninjured adolescent girls are unhappy with at least two features/parts of their bodies, most of them stating they want to be thinner. BID is more common among adolescents than young adults: 25% male and 45% female college students overestimate their body. Adolescent girls have a stronger desire to become thinner while adolescent boys desire a more muscular, athletic shape (Hosseini and Padhy 2023). White women typically report higher rates of body image dissatisfaction compared to their African American counterparts.
Altered components in body image disturbance
  • Adding the explicit connection, measure, or more evidence between the affective component in body image disturbance would be beneficial.
    • How significant the discrepancy is between one’s perceived body image and the desired body tells us how strong the “affectiveness” component in BID will be (Hamamoto et. al, 2022). Going into depth about not only recognizing the prevalence of BID but the degree to which it affects someone’s view on themselves. The stronger the desire for an ideal body type and the larger the discrepancy between one’s perceived BID and their ideal body type may lead to more excessive and dangerous behavior, coupled with comorbidity of other psychopathologies will only enhance motivation to achieve the ideal body type (I came to this conclusion, no citing for this claim specifically).
Discussion

The addition of a discussion section would provide more of a sense of closure. It also would have the benefit of making the format more consistent with many other journal articles. Consider providing a summary of the key takeaways, as well as resourcesto identify and minimize BID, implement treatments for BDD and other eating disorders. This article would really benefit from having a discussion section.

Citations
  • Dalhoff, A. W., Romero Frausto, H., Romer, G., & Wessing, I. (2019). Perceptive Body Image Distortion in Adolescent Anorexia Nervosa: Changes After Treatment. Frontiers in Psychiatry, 10, 485482. https://doi.org/10.3389/fpsyt.2019.00748
  • Hamamoto, Y., Suzuki, S., & Sugiura, M. (2022). Two components of body-image disturbance are differentially associated with distinct eating disorder characteristics in healthy young women. PLoS ONE, 17(1). https://doi.org/10.1371/journal.pone.0262513
  • Phillips, K. A., Menard, W., Fay, C., & Weisberg, R. (2005). Demographic Characteristics, Phenomenology, Comorbidity, and Family History in 200 Individuals With Body Dysmorphic Disorder. Psychosomatics, 46(4), 317. https://doi.org/10.1176/appi.psy.46.4.317
  • Seyed Alireza Hosseini, & Padhy, R. K. (2023, February 12). Body Image Distortion. Nih.gov; StatPearls Publishing. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/books/NBK546582/

OhanaUnitedTalk page 00:00, 19 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@OhanaUnited Thank you very much for the 2nd revier's feedback on my work. I've reviewed her suggestions and aligned the text accordingly, improving certain details. I did not incorporate all the proposed articles, as some didn't seem essential for a thorough review.
I've added to the missing sections, though not exhaustively, to avoid overloading the text on body dissatisfaction. I aimed to distinguish this from body image disorder, emphasizing that the latter involves altered body shape perception, not just dissatisfaction.
Appreciate the insights so much. Srobodao84 (discuss • contribs) 00:18, 9 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Rwatson1955 Please also see this author's reply to the second peer review. Thanks. OhanaUnitedTalk page 03:11, 11 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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