Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2025/Spirituality and mental health
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[edit source]Hi Alicia,
Great work on your theoretical writing in your chapter so far. I can see that you have structured your focus questions quite strictly and thats ok but you might want to reword the last one 'What is the Humanistic approach and how does it contribute to improving mental health in clinical practice?' to something more like; which psych theories contribute to improving mental health?
The reason I think this could be a good idea is so that you can incorporate the SDT theory or even Maslow's hierarchy model to help you demonstrate the importance of spirituality in mental health.
I think your table of findings is a great way of getting info across simply.
have you considered what you want the reader to take from your chapter at the end? that might help your direction as you write the chapter.
Good luck,
Ari --Ubaldo111 (discuss • contribs) 05:44, 5 September 2024 (UTC)
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[edit source]@AliciaEdwards1212: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:
- Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
- Also search past book chapters for related topics
- For the topic development, consider:
- What psychological theory(ies) can help to understand and explain this topic?
- What is the main research in this area?
- Let me know if I can do anything else to support the development of this chapter.
Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:21, 10 August 2024 (UTC)
Heading casing
Hi AliciaEdwards1212. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development ~~~~ |
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:28, 25 August 2024 (UTC)
Focus question clarification and theory idea
[edit source]Hello!
Great topic choice and very interesting research for you I am sure. Visually, the page is looking really appealing and I like your attention to detail on the opening scenario.
One of your focus questions is "what is the difference between spirituality and religion?", however, I did not come across the answer to this in your content so far. It might be difficult to answer this question directly, and if you are still interested in keeping it within your research, my suggestion is that spirituality is referred to as a deeply personal and individualistic process, rather than religion, which is seemingly more organised around specific traditions and practices.
In saying that, spirituality can be found within religion and the two can overlap, so it might be difficult to find complete distinctions overall.
One theory that I had in mind to support your spirituality argument can be found in Carl Jung's theory of individuation, which is said to be about bridging the gap between the conscious and unconscious or the self and the ego, as a process of self development and spirituality. It also lends itself to the idea of being social creatures and a part of the 'whole' in a mystical sense, yet, also reaching towards the individual evolution and actualisation. I see you have already referred to Maslow in your writing, so there is potential to make that argument stronger by adding Jung's theory alongside it.
Well done! Looking forward to reading your finished chapter. Danikollas (discuss • contribs) 04:29, 26 September 2024 (UTC)
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[edit source]Great work Alicia,
your written component is off to a good start. One adjustment I would suggest for your chapter is ensuring the figures you refer to are ordered and situated accordingly to when they are referred to within the text. I noticed in the first few sections, your figure numbers were scattered with the first figure being labelled as figure 2. I just thought this may be distracting and confusing for readers as they try to grasp your topic and develop an understanding.
Additionally, regarding your references, don't forget to format them correctly according to APA guidelines and the desired assessment format. I noticed there were a few citations that deviated from these APA guidelines and had certain titles italicised when they should not have been. Additionally, as per the assessment guidelines, don't forget to list your resources with a hanging indent.
Lastly, as a frequent comment I have examined across other books, don't forget the headings should use sentence casing, where only the first letter of the sentence heading is capitalised (e.g., 'Self-determination theory' rather than 'Self-Determination Theory'. On this as well, consider shorter alternatives for some of your headings. Ultimately, headings should be an extremely short sentence, of only few words at the most, describing what the following content is going to be focused on. If you find it difficult to use these shorter headings to describe the content, utilise subheadings where necessary to break the heading down into its relevant components and sections.
Aside from this, good start on your chapter. I look forward to reading it in its final form. Good luck! Sebastian Siakimotu (discuss • contribs) 21:27, 6 October 2024 (UTC)