Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Vicarious embarrassment

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly formatted The sub-title is incorrectly worded The title and sub-title are mispelt Headings The original sub-title offers three clear questions that should be used to help structure the chapter Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure Overview Promising plan Add a scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) at the start of this section to help catch reader interest Add a brief, evocative description of the problem/topic Make this section user-friendly Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Conclusion (the most important section): Well underway Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Learning feature Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Excellent For APA referencing style, check and correct: page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent Use sentence casing User page Excellent – used effectively Excellent description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Indirect link(s) to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk/discussion page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:26, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is clearly established through an example Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research The presentation makes excellent use of citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A conclusion is presented with excellent/very good/good/reasonably good/basic take-home message(s) Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is very well paced Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Maybe microphone is slightly too close? The narrated content is well matched to the target topic Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is very well produced The visual content is well matched to the target topic Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A written description of the presentation is provided Excellent use of time codes Links to and from the book chapter are provided An active hyperlink to the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:54, 16 November 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Excellent use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader interest via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds on one previous, related chapter and/or Wikipedia article Build more strongly on related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Use tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Very good use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good to excellent Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and make correct use of commas Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[1] Abbreviations Only use abbreviations such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc. inside parentheses, otherwise spell them out Figures Figures are very well captioned Citations use correct APA style List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname References use excellent APA style: Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than an em-dash (—) Learning features Excellent use of learning features One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Move links to non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Excellent use of image(s) No use of table(s) Very good use of feature box(es) Very good use of case studies or examples Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~14 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:41, 18 November 2023 (UTC)