Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Sport injury recovery motivation

Heading casing

Hi U3210285. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:09, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Suggested viewing

Hi @U3210285, Check out this documentary - Daniel Menzel who played AFL and suffered 4 ACL injuries. https://www.mtmf.com.au/documentary/ Good Luck, sincerely, Andrew, U3235369 (discuss • contribs) 03:09, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hi, would possibly talking about the athletes mindset prior to injury compared to after help with depth for athlete background. Also would definitely look at career ending injuries of athletes and how this changed their lifestyle choices. For example, turning to substance abuse. --Zmelmoth02 (discuss • contribs) 14:47, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure See earlier comment about Heading casing Some of the headings are overly long Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Quiz doesn't need a separate heading; instead embed quiz questions within relevant sections Overview Move the scenario or case study to the start of this section to help catch reader interest. Include an image. Use 3rd person perspective (except 1st/2nd person can work for feature boxes/scenarios) Make description of the problem/topic brief Present focus questions in a feature box at the end of this section Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Maintain balance between sections (e.g., there is lot about SDT - be selective) Promising balance of theory and research. Ideally, synthesise and provide examples. Provide an introductory paragraph before breaking into sub-sections Conclusion (the most important section): Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Break up long paragraph Figure Excellent - A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Well done on creating and uploading your own image! – this can also be listed as a social contribution Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Excellent use of example(s)/case study(ies) Promising use of quiz question(s) References Good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable) page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also OK Include "(Book chapter, year)" after links to other motivation and emotion book chapters on Wikiversity Only include links directly related to the sub-title Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population External links OK Use sentence casing Include source in brackets after link Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population User page Very good Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Right idea, but provide a numbered list and DIRECT link to evidence for each contribution To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:25, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter. It makes good use of psychological theory and basic use of research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory A very good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained The phases of psychosocial adjustment are interesting. But they seem to be more about emotional than motivational response? Builds on one previous, related chapter Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Very good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Place more emphasis on explaining the motivational aspects of sport injury recovery Good use of conceptual diagrams to help clearly convey key theoretical information Lack of sufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) One good main examples to illustrate theoretical concepts The example could be improved by focusing more on the motivational aspects of recovery from sports injury Any other examples? Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Basic critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some/Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Basic integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Basic summary and conclusion Why is this important? Key points are summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Embed direct quotes within sentences and paragraphs, rather than presenting them holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. "People" is often a better term than "individuals" The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet points into full paragraph format Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Convey one idea per paragraph using three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes Avoid overly emotive language (e.g,. shatters) in science-based communication Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Use serial commas[2] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Check and correct use of that vs. who Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) "Use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Write numbers under 10 using words (e.g., five). Express numbers 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Replace double spaces with single spaces Figures Figures are well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Learning features Good use of learning features Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Good use of case studies or examples Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Include sources in parentheses Move external links to the external link section Good use of external links in the "External links" section Include sources in parentheses Social contribution 1 logged moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence Several logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess Use a numbered list per Tutorial 02

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:24, 1 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation Overview This presentation could be improved by displaying and narrating a slide with the same title and sub-title as the book chapter to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation A context for the presentation is clearly established The audience is global. Australia represents ~0.3% of world population. So, the opening example is not as compelling as it could be if international statistics were used. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with reasonably good take-home message(s) Audio The presentation makes reasonably good use of narrated audio Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement The narration is reasonably well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes basic use of animated slides Some of the animations are distracting (e.g., pushups) The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Check and correct grammar and spelling (e.g., likliehood; athletes -> athlete's) Font colour could use greater contrast to make it easier to read (e.g., Phase 2) Consider using sentence casing rather than all capitals The visual communication is supplemented in a good way by animated images Also consider using diagrams The presentation is reasonably well produced The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Provide an informative description to help viewers decide whether they want to watch A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:10, 10 November 2023 (UTC)