Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
A table is presented - remove bold in cells. Measurement scales are not of major relevance to the topic. Instead consider a table which illustrates how difference aspects of MT might apply in the workplace.
Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc.
Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
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Latest comment: 1 year ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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The rationale for the choice of case study is unclear.
The Kobe Bryant example is probably more applicable to a MT and sports topic - perhaps this case study reflects a personal interest rather than a case study which might appeal to a broader, international audience?
How about using a more applicable workplace MT example?
Promising focus question(s)
The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title)
A good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
The section about mental toughness traits could be improved by providing more explanation about how resilience and hardiness are similar to, and different from, MT
The chapter could be strengthened by:
Focusing more directly on MT (and less on related concepts)
Focusing more directly on MT and the workplace, whilst providing embedded links to other chapters about MT in other contexts
It is unclear how the section about measurement scales helps to address the topic or any of the focus questions; it would be better to provide a more indepth review of MT in the workplace research
More detail about key workplace MT studies would be ideal
Explain abbreviations (spell out) (e.g., SMART) when they are first introduced
Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
Proofreading
More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
Basic use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Good use of image(s)
Basic use of table(s) - remove bold, left-align, add APA style caption etc.
Basic use of feature box(es)
Basic use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
Insufficient use of case studies or examples
Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
Basic use of external links in the "External links" section
Latest comment: 11 months ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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"Good afternoon" - what if someone is watching in the morning?
An opening slide with the sub-title is displayed and narrated. Also display and narrate the title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and to be consistent with the book chapter. Include the question mark (grammar).
Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
Establish a context for the presentation (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important), to help the viewer understand
Focus questions and/or an outline of topics are presented
The audio is hard to follow because so much content is presented so quickly
The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio
Slow down and leave longer pauses between sentences. This will help viewers to cognitively digest the spoken information as it is being presented, before moving on to the next point.
Use greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement
Audio recording quality was OK. There are some static blips. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality.
The narrated content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic
The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides
Remove overcapitalisation
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time
The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams
The presentation is basically produced using simple tools
The visual content is reasonably well matched to the target topic (see content) but lacked synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic
The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent
Provide an informative description to help viewers decide whether they want to watch