Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Default mode network and the self

Reference suggestion

@U3190506: Hey David, I have changed your first heading to suit heading casing style that is needed for this assessment. Only the first letter is to be capitalised in our headings and the rest lower case. I've only done the first one so you can change the rest yourself. I'd also like to suggest looking into the work by Dr.Carhart-Harris who does a significant amount of research with psychedelics analysing their effects on the brain, he has some fascinating information on how the DMN works, not just in relation to psychedelics either. It may help with writing your chapter. He is also interviewed on the series "How To Change Your Mind' (Episode 2). You may find this interesting too in relation to the DMN and how much it can contribute to changing our perspectives and our sense of self when influenced by psilocybin. Good luck with your chapter! Looking forward to reading the finished product! --SammyTabrett (discuss • contribs) 23:42, 3 October 2023 (UTC)

Initial suggestions

@U3190506: Thanks for tackling this topic.

Some initial suggestions:

• Check out other and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Cognitive
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Self
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?
• Also check out science about psychedelics and the DFN

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along.

Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:33, 6 August 2023 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter Well under the maximum word count, so there is room to expand For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Provide a case study or scenario with an image in a feature box to help engage reader interest Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Good focus questions Psychedelics can be used an example or application, but this isn't necessary and is not a core question Table 1 is too detailed for the Overview - move into a subsequent section Theory A reasonably good range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Add a clearer description of what the DMN is and how it relates to the self Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Reasonably good depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Basic use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help convey key theoretical information Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Basic use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Basic review of relevant research More detail about key DMN studies would be ideal Any systematic reviews or meta-analyses in this area? Greater emphasis on effect sizes could be helpful. Insufficient use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the tags) Insufficient critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Integration Reasonably good integration between theory and research The chapter places more emphasis on theory than on research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion Remind the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest Key points are well summarised Add practical, take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Consider using a grammar checking tool Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats') Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour) Proofreading More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard APA style Use sentence casing for the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc. Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Replace double spaces with single spaces Figures Figures are very well captioned Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1) Tables Use APA style for captions. See example Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation) Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Do not include author first name or initials Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References are not in full APA style. For example: Provide the full journal titles Check and correct use of italicisation Separate page numbers using an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Learning features Very good use of learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s) Good use of table(s) Good use of feature box(es) Very good use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Basic use of case studies or examples Very good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Use alphabetical order Very good use of external links in the "External links" section Use sentence casing Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:49, 3 November 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation The presentation is slightly under the maximum time limit, so there was room for further development of the ideas Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation The audio version is slightly different to the written version (audio refers to psychedelics) Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A basic context for the presentation is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research Ideally, make more explicit use of research Psychedelics can be used as a useful example but isn't an intrinsic aspect of this topic The presentation includes some citations to support claims However, there are many references that aren't cited The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides easy to understand information Conclusion A reasonably good audio Conclusion is presented The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages in response to each focus question Audio The audio is easy to follow The presentation makes good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Reasonably good intonation Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but could be improved by emphasising the best psychological research about this topic Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it relatively easy to read Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) but there could be more synthesis of the best psychological research about this topic Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. A link to the book chapter is not provided A link from the book chapter is provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated in very small font on the final slide. The links are not clickable. Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description) A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:22, 8 November 2023 (UTC)