Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Brief motivational interviewing as a health intervention

Initial suggestions

@JasnaM: Thanks for tackling this topic. Some initial suggestions:

• Note that there was a previous attempt, so check out that chapter and the feedback on its talk page.
• Check out other related chapters and see how you can build on, link to, and integrate with that work:
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Health
  • Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Motivational interviewing
• What psychological theories can help to understand? What is the main research in this area?

Let me know if I can do anything else as you go along. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:39, 7 August 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure (e.g., break down the components) Good alignment between focus questions and heading structure Overview Move the scenario or case study into a feature box (with an image) to the start of this section to help catch reader interest\ A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided Simplify/abbreviate - move detail into subsequent sections Focus questions are reasonably well aligned with sub-title and top-level headings Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with some relevant citations In theoretical framework provide some context about the evolution of MI and BMI SDT and TM are only relevant to the extent that they are part of BMI - explain connections; otherwise go deeper into BMI itself Multiple citations should be in alphabetical order; also note when to use et al. (APA style) Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations There is promising potential coverage of theory, however, strive to balance the content with critical review of relevant research Conclusion (the most important section): Underway Figure A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Learning feature Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Very good Are there any systematic reviews about this topic? Resources Excellent User page Created – minimal, but sufficient Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Bit messy - use a numbered list First half-dozen links are indirect Latter half-dozen links are direct to three different types of contributions with direct link(s) to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:16, 26 September 2023 (UTC)

Suggestion for case study

Hi Jasna,

Great job on your chapter so far! I just had a quick comment about your case study. You mention Casey's doctor measuring her BMI (body mass index), but then later refer to brief motivational interviewing as BMI. I think using the same acronym for two different concepts is confusing for the reader, particularly because when most people think of BMI they will think of body mass index, as that is how it's more commonly used.

It might be a good idea to either 1) make a quick comment stating that brief motivation interviewing is a different BMI than body mass index, or 2) only describe write about Casey's body mass index without using the BMI acronym.

Also, you already do a similar thing with the table, but it could be an idea to refer back to the Casey case study later in your chapter, outlining how the conversation with her doctor could have gone if the doctor had utilised brief motivation interviewing in the conversation with Casey.

Good luck with the rest of your chapter! Hopefully this is helpful :) U3213084 (discuss • contribs) 04:50, 5 October 2023 (UTC)

Thank you for the suggestions regarding the use of BMI acronym, I'll definitely fix that. The case study conversation between Carly and doctor, with doctor applying BMI, is evolving.

I really appreciate your comment.

Jasna JasnaM (discuss • contribs) 23:55, 5 October 2023 (UTC)

Read the chapter and edited some references and figure

Hi Jasna, I read through your chapter, great work!

You have a strong introduction, that demonstrates the problem.

I noticed some inconsistencies in you Figures set-up, James mentioned so long as they are consistent then that is fine. I switched them both to Italics.

There were some inconsistencies with your intext referencing you sometimes miss the comma (,), it should look like this (Nath et al., 2008) or Nath et al. (2008) have said that …

I believe I got them all.

https://guides.library.uq.edu.au/referencing/apa7/journal-articles

Added an ed dash between the pages in your reference list. En dash – . only some were missing it.

https://apastyle.apa.org/instructional-aids/reference-guide.pdf

Your chapter is looking good!

Thanks

Thrainn U3217955 (discuss • contribs) 23:07, 5 October 2023 (UTC)

Thanks Thrainn. I really appreciate you fixing the referencing and ensuring consistency across the chapter.

Jasna JasnaM (discuss • contribs) 02:00, 6 October 2023 (UTC)

Edit for In-Text References

Hi @JasnaM - congratulations on your book chapter - it is very clear and flows well :)

I made a few changes to some of your in-text references - for APA 7 where there are 3 or more authors, the format is FirstAuthor, et al.

PS - I love the AI generated images of Carly - they are terrific!

All the best, Cheers, Jorja -- JorjaFive (discuss • contribs) 15:22, 8 October 2023 (UTC)

Hi @JorjaFive

Thank you for your kind words and help with APA referencing. I usually use EndNote which does a really good job with it and I really missed it for this assignment.

Cheers

Jasna JasnaM (discuss • contribs) 22:23, 8 October 2023 (UTC)

Edits

Hi, thank you for this interactive and informative book chapter. I think your use of case studies, images, tables, figures, and quizzes made the chapter flow while maintaining the interest of the readers. I have made some minor changes to the errors in your reference list, hope you don't mind!

Jingying Chen (discuss • contribs) 20:14, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The chapter is very well structured, with excellent examples. It is theory-strong with a very impressive critical review of relevant research literature. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Clear focus questions Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Build more strongly on other related chapters and/or Wikipedia articles(e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Very good summary and conclusion What is the motivational insight / take-away message? Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent Check and correct use of that vs. who APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Figures Figures are very well captioned Tables Table captions use APA style Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) List multiple citations in alphabetical order by first author surname A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al.") because it is an abbreviation of et alii References use correct APA style Learning features Excellent use of learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) Very good use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of case studies or examples Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Also include links to related book chapters Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section Use alphabetical order Social contribution ~15 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence ~4 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:56, 3 November 2023 (UTC)

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:15, 9 November 2023 (UTC)