Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Topophilia

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence Headings Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure It makes logical sense to use the sub-title questions as top-level headings. Consider further development of sub-headings in those sections. The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research Promising use in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Also provide embedded links to other relevant book chapters (e.g., biophilia). Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Hasn't been developed What might the take-home, practical messages be? In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions? Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: remove "pp. " page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:16, 1 October 2022 (UTC)

Recommendations surrounding indigenous Australian connection to land and wellbeing

Hello there, fascinating topic and can be related to Aboriginal Australian connection to land and country - as well as many other indigenous cultures. Here are two really good articles discussing the symbiotic relationship between indigenous people and their land - If their traditional land is unwell through deforestation or effects of industry it seems to have health impacts on the personal health of aboriginal Australians. I'd say that this is probably mediated through psychological means.

Schultz. (2017). Caring for country and the health of aboriginal and torres strait Islander Australians. The Medical Journal of Australia., 207(1), 8–10.https://doi.org/10.5694/mja16.00687

Taylor-Bragge. (2021). People Needs Country: the symbiotic effects of landcare and wellbeing for Aboriginal peoples and their countries. Australian Psychologist., 56(6), 458–471. https://doi.org/10.1080/00050067.2021.1983756

Goodluck! Noah O'Brien (discuss • contribs) 07:40, 16 October 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Build more strongly on other nature-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Nature). Theory – Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Very useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research – Key findings Relevant research is reasonably well reviewed. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research – Critical thinking Very good critical thinking about research is evident. For example, theoretical concepts are well differentiated and linked. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced. Integration Discussion of theory and research is reasonably well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Clear take-home message(s). Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent. Figures Figures are very well used. Figures are very well captioned. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are very good, but not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) When citing page numbers in parentheses, precede with a comma rather than colon (e.g., Smith, 2000, p. 1). Do not include author first names or initials. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[1] Include hyperlinked dois Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). No use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~7 logged, useful moderate to major social contributions with direct links to evidence. Thanks very much for your capitalisation fixes.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:52, 29 October 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This should be a stand-alone presentation, so don't overly refer to the book chapter (it will be linked in the description), and focus on addressing the topic Focus questions are presented Consider creating an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the topic (e.g., by using an example or explaining why it is important - this is provided at ~45 secs but could be a great way to start), to help the viewer understand Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes little to no use of relevant psychological research Include citations to support claims The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented but there were no written take-home message(s) The Conclusion only partially fitted within the time limit Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good] intonation The audio communication is hesitant in some places — could benefit from further practice Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams The presentation is basically produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation A written description of the presentation is provided A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink is broken Licensing Image sources are communicated The copyright for at least some of the images doesn't allow for re-use and therefore this presentation probably violated the copyrights of the image owners A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:36, 10 November 2022 (UTC)