Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Money priming, motivation, and emotion

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:04, 27 September 2022 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent – used effectively Description about self provided Link(s) provided to professional profile(s) but it is not publicly accessible? Maybe open up or link to LinkedIn or Twitter profile instead? Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Excellent – Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion - perhaps the latter couple of sections could be integrated into earlier sections or they could be used as case studies/example feature boxes? Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Overview - Consider: an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered the example could focus on money priming rather than general priming? abbreviating the length of the focus questions an image which is more tailored to money priming Avoid providing too much background information about priming. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on money priming in relation to motivation and emotion. Good balance of theory and research Promising use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation Resources See also Excellent Also link to relevant book chapters External links Excellent Academic peer-reviewed sources should be used as references instead Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:04, 27 September 2022 (UTC)

In text citation

Hi,

Looks like your chapter is well developed - it is certainly an interesting read! One thing I noticed is some inconsistencies with your in-text citations, for example:

- (Aghakhani, et al., 2019) - This should not have a comma immediately after author's name

-... behaviour (Jiang et al., 2014; Sanfey et al., 2003. Money... - This one needs a closing bracket after your citations

-... In a study done by Chan et al., (2021), it was... - This one should not have a comma after et al.

-... as procrastination (Kennedy and Tuckman, 2013).These ... - This one should be '&' rather than 'and' since it is within the brackets.

Hope that helps, good luck! U3217287 (discuss • contribs) 01:37, 15 October 2022 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hi there, it looks like you've done a great job. I've done some minor proof-reading and editing that I hope improves clarity. There were a couple of sentences where I wasn't entirely sure what you meant and I've added clarification templates to help you find them when you do your own final read-through. I also noticed that you haven't referred to figures 1, 3 or 5 in the main body of your text. Good luck with your final polishing! U3141987 (discuss • contribs) 04:37, 15 October 2022 (UTC)

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Well developed Overview Primary example is very good; could be even better by being money-related! Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image Clear focus question(s) Theory – Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory Build more strongly on other money-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Money) Theory – Depth Insightful depth is provided about the selected theory(ies) Key citations are well used Tables and/or lists could be used more effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts Research – Key findings Reasonably good review of relevant research More detail about key studies could be useful Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful Research – Critical thinking Good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations pointing out critiques/counterarguments suggesting specific directions for future research Claims are referenced Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated Conclusion Reasonably good summary Add practical, take-home message(s) Written expression – Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences Layout Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and make correct use of commas [1] Check and correct use of that vs. who APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159) Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words Figures Figures are very well captioned Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text Citations use correct APA style References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression – Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of image(s) No use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) No use of quiz(zes) Good use of case studies or examples Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Also link to related book chapters. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Move academic sources into references. Social contribution ~8 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:41, 5 November 2022 (UTC)

Multimedia presentation feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation — but not narrated. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest Establish a context for the topic, to help the viewer understand Focus questions are presented Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section Consider using a money prime for an example in the first minute Review grammar (e.g., peoples -> people's) and spelling (e.g., Wikiveristy -> Wikiversity) The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion) The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. The presentation includes citations The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s) The Conclusion did not entirely fit within the time limit Audio The audio is easy to follow Maybe start with a different word than "alighty" and check/grammar of first sentence (was this scripted?) The presentation makes good use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Good intonation Audio recording quality was excellent Video Overall, visual display quality is good The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read Consider using a sans-serif typeface to make the text easier to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by images and/or diagrams The presentation is well produced using simple tools Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check capitalisation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated It is difficult to read the image source details when dark text is used on a dark background Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description) A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:11, 8 November 2022 (UTC)