Your chapter is looking really good, I'll be keen to read your final copy, what an interesting topic! I minor suggestion I have for your chapter would be adding in internal wiki links to key words and/or concepts throughout the body of your chapter. It just helps to add an extra dimension of information and knowledge to your chapter.
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Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
At least one contribution has been made and summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence
Use a numbered list
Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to create a direct link to social contributions (click on compare selected revisions and link to that page)
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Overall, this is a reasonably good chapter that makes use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.
Perhaps a little less about historical aspects would allow for more emphasis on explaining how psychological theory can be used in hostage negotiation.
Since the Lindt Café negotiation "failed", how about an example when it worked well?
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
"People" is often a better term than "individuals".
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats').
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words.
Figures
Figures are well used.
Figures are reasonably well captioned.
Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example.
Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style.
Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
References are not in full APA style. For example:
Punctuation
Check and correct use of italicisation
Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
Include hyperlinked dois
Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Good use of image(s).
No use of table(s).
Good use of feature box(es).
Very good use of quiz(zes).
Very good use of case studies or examples.
Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
Good use of external links in the "External links" section.
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The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
