Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Climate change helplessness

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Heading casing[edit source]

Hi U3193000. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:47, 26 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Govermental responses[edit source]

Hi! this was 100% going to be my second choice of topic, so super interested in it. I was wondering if you were going to touch on how government responses (or lack thereof) to the climate emergency is impacting helplessness. Theres this really interesting study in the lancet that can be found here that directly links climate anxiety and feelings of powerlessness to inadequate government responses. U3148366 Chris (discusscontribs) 07:12, 28 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Relevant Topic[edit source]

Hi! I am also interested in the topic and am doing a similar one (environmental grief). I really like your figure, I think it breaks up the writing very nicely. I found this resource which you might find useful! https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/abs/pii/S027249442100102X

Gabrielle Eagling - c 16:43, 9 October 2022

Suggestions for this chapter[edit source]

Hello! Something that I might suggest for your chapter is including more hyperlinks to relevant theories and concepts as well as some Study cases, example boxes, figures and maybe a table. Hope this helps with your chapter! U3216389 (discusscontribs) 01:59, 13 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]


The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to see editing changes made whilst reviewing this chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments below may also be about all material on the page at the time of providing this feedback.

Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

User page[edit source]

  1. Created – minimal, but sufficient
  2. Very brief description about self provided – consider expanding
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with direct link(s) to evidence – this was covered in Tutorial 03. Looking ahead to the book chapter submission, see how to earn marks for social contributions.

Headings[edit source]

  1. Insufficient development
  2. Standard headings are missing. See Template:ME/BCS.
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  4. Under-developed, 2-level heading structure – develop further
  5. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections
  6. Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  7. Reduce the emphasis on the background info and significantly the section currently titled "Climate Change Helplessness"

Key points[edit source]

  1. Very good development of key points for background info
  2. Insufficient development of key points about CCH
  3. Overview and Conclusion (the two most important sections) are missing
  4. Strive for an integrated balance of CCH psychological theory and research
  5. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  6. Consider including more examples/case studies

Figure[edit source]

  1. Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text

References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. italicisation
    2. doi formatting
    3. make doi hyperlinks active (i.e., clickable)
    4. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
    5. Several URLs are unnecessarily. Use the simplest link, preferably a doi.

Resources[edit source]

  1. Not developed

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:45, 7 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

social contribution[edit source]

for in-text citations in parentheses 'and' should be '&'. I fixed one that was missed :)--Alec.cortez (discusscontribs) 01:41, 16 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Potential improvements[edit source]

Hi !

I enjoyed reading your chapter and would like to add a couple of points which may improve your chapter :)

  1. Try and widen the scope instead of focusing on just the Australian government - see if you can find resources that focus on the whole world (I see you have a section on world leader still in the process so maybe this is where that will come in). Remember that Australia only represents 0.33% of the population and we want to think more big picture.
  2. In reference to the sub-heading of "what is learned helplessness" remember that you should have a minimum of two subheadings under a major heading (I am not sure if Quizzes as a heading counts) - perhaps you could add an example of learned helplessness directly related to climate change with support of a resource to really highlight the issue .
  3. In the eating vegetarian/ vegan part it would be great to have a small explanation on the mechanisms behind gas emissions from beef and dairy productions (You could add a cool picture in here too!). I feel like people tend to assume that these productions are bad but many people (including me!) don't really understand the actual harmful effect.

I Hope this helps you !! Good Luck :) U3210431 (discusscontribs) 05:33, 13 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]


Hey! Just some feedback, I didn't want to change anything but just look over your referencing in Climate change helplessness paragraph as some references are not in APA 7 format i.e. (Abrams and Hogg, 1990) to (Abrams & Hogg, 1990) and (Landry, et al. 2018) to (Landry et al., 2018). Hope this helps you! --U3230861 (discusscontribs) 03:06, 14 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]


Hi, I was just wondering if you have looked into the link between climate change and increase in rates of mental illness. I understand that may lead into a conversation of how much is actual increase in mental illness and how much is simply discovery and labelling that did not previously exist which is outside the scope of this page but I do think it is worth mentioning. - U3216502

Heading structure[edit source]

The overall number of headings looks reasonable. My main suggestion are to:

  1. avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use either 0 or 2+ sub-heading
  2. provide at least an introductory paragraph in a section before branching into sub-headings

External links[edit source]

I've noticed that you don't have any external links yet, and that some information explaining how humans have contributed to climate change may be good to add (just briefly). This external link could be useful for people who want to know more: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=myZAvqqp9Jc Noah O'Brien (discusscontribs) 06:45, 16 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Content[edit source]

Hi, I have noticed you've written about the actions some different countries are taking to combat climate change. it would be interesting to see the viewpoints across different cultures and financial demographics and whether this would effect climate change helplessness. U3216963 (discusscontribs) 16:29, 17 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Book chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Well developed Overview.

Theory – Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained
  2. The section "Institutional response to the climate crisis" has been removed because it is not directly relevant to the topic in the sub-title.
  3. Builds reasonably well on related chapters.

Theory – Depth[edit source]

  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts.

Research – Key findings[edit source]

  1. Basic overview of relevant research.
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal e.g.,
    • Expand about: Landry, et al. (2018)
    • Include: Salomon, E., Preston, J. L., & Tannenbaum, M. B. (2017). Climate change helplessness and the (de)moralization of individual energy behavior. Journal of Experimental Psychology: Applied, 23(1), 15–28. https://doi.org/10.1037/xap0000105

Research – Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Basic critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. suggesting specific directions for future research
  3. Claims are referenced.

Integration[edit source]

  1. Where research is discussed, it is integrated with theory.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Key points are well summarised.
  2. Clear take-home message(s).

Written expression – Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. Internationalise: As noted in peer feedback above, write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population.
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. "People" is often a better term than "individuals".
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
    3. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading — use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats').https://grammar.yourdictionary.com/punctuation/apostrophe-rules.html].
    3. Use serial commas[1] — they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min).
    4. Check and correct use of that vs. who.
  4. APA style
    1. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    2. Figures
      1. Figure were out of sequential order.
      2. Figures are well captioned.
      3. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text.
    3. Citations use correct APA style.
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation
      2. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Written expression – Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is excellent.
  2. Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. Excellent use of image(s).
  4. No use of table(s).
  5. Good use of feature box(es).
  6. Basic use of quiz(zes). Question has been removed because it wasn't directly about climate change helplessness.
  7. Very good use of case studies or examples.
  8. Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
  9. External links weren't counted for marking purposes (over word limit).

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~5 logged, minor, last-minute social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:25, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also narrate the title and sub-title.
  2. This presentation has a basic introduction to engage audience interest
  3. A context for the topic is established
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little
  4. The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion)
  5. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological theory
  6. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research
  7. The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
  8. The presentation provides easy to understand information

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary
  2. Add text-based take-home messages
  3. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow
  2. Audio communication is well paced
  3. Good intonation
  4. Audio recording quality was mediocre. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality.
  5. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is good
  2. The presentation makes basic use of animated slides
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time
  5. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams
  6. The presentation is basically produced using Vyond

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. A link to the book chapter is provided but the hyperlink isn't active to allow 1-click access
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:58, 21 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]