Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Self-regulation failure

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Hi the chapter is coming together great!, a change id consider making is removing the boxes within the template to show a refined and easy to read chapter topic. yet other than that i feel like your chapter is great>— Preceding unsigned comment added by [[User:{{{1}}}|{{{1}}}]] ([[User talk:{{{1}}}#top|talk]] • [[Special:Contributions/{{{1}}}|contribs]])

Hello I also think your chapter is coming together really well! One suggestion I have is to maybe provide a bit more information in your captions for your figures so that the audience can interpret them better, for example the figure about the social cognitive theory. Best wishes. --U3202315 (discuss • contribs) 18:20, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title The title is correctly worded The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Excellent Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Key points Overview: SR is well described Consider adding what can go wrong - how can SR fail? Consider adding focus questions Consider adding an image Consider adding an example or case study For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) APA style: ‘self-control’ -> "self-control" Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Basic development of key points for each section There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory; strive to balance with review of relevant research Consider including more examples/case studies Cite each reference at least once in the main text. Conclusion (the most important section): under developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented Caption should include Figure X. ... Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation page numbers Resources See also Excellent External links Appears to be a peer-reviewed article, so shift into the References section and cite in main body

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:29, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Wording and capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Wording and capitalisation of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents Author details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Excellent - used effectively Created - minimal, but sufficient Not created Description about self provided, with link(s) to professional profile(s) Description about self provided Add description about self Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Add link to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list Add a brief summary of each contribution Add your signature to comments on talk/discussion pages None summarised with link(s) to evidence Headings Excellent Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure It makes logical sense to use the sub-title questions as stop-level headings. Consider further development of sub-headings in those sections. Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development to limit the focus on background information and expand the focus on the target topic Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure Under-developed, 1-level heading structure - develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the largest section(s) Overly complicated 3-level structure - consider simplifying Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings Use default heading formatting (e.g., avoid bold, italics, underline etc.) Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Good balance of theory and research There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory; strive to balance with review of relevant research Expand theory and research Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. This is particularly important for this chapter as there are several other chapters about closely related concepts. Excellent use of examples/case studies Consider including more examples/case studies Cite each reference at least once in the main text. Include APA style citations Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., FirstAuthor et al., year) Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Write using 3rd person perspective Use British/Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour) Move references into the References section. Keep citations in the main body. Conclusion (the most important section): well developed under developed hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure Excellent A figure is presented A figure is not presented Caption uses APA style Caption should include Figure X. ... Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view References Excellent Very good Good OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: alphabetical order capitalisation italicisation doi formatting None Remember that the goal is to identify and use the best academic theory and research about this topic. Resources See also Excellent Very good Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link Also link to relevant book chapters Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages External links Excellent Very good Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:29, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. Consider developing focus questions to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided. The chapter somewhat misses the mark in that it is more about self-regulation than self-regulation failure. Instead, provide embedded links to the self-regulation chapter and concentrate this chapter on theory, research, and practical illustrations of SR failure and how it can be overcome. Theory — Depth Insufficient depth is provided about the theory(ies) related to self-regulation failure. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration There is basic integration between theory and research. Conclusion Basic summary. Consider reminding the reader about the importance of the problem or phenomenon of interest. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of that vs. who. Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). APA style Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Each Table and Figure is referred to at least once within the main text. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Do not include author initials. References use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Include hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). No use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). No use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:01, 9 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented. Also narrate the title and sub-title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Focus questions are presented but not narrated. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes little to no use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. Concentrate on self-regulation failure (rather than success). Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was good. The presentation lacks the polish that comes with practice. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The presentation is produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is not provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:57, 20 November 2021 (UTC)