Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Psychedelics, altered consciousness, and personal growth

Metacognitive capacities

Hey Mriganka. Very interesting topic. I was researching and thought that maybe it would be a good idea for you to discuss and talk about the increase in metacognitive capacities upon taking psilocybin as well. --U3206215 (discuss • contribs) 03:28, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

Hey! great topic! Johns hopkins centre for psychadelic and consiousness research has a wealth of inforamtion that might assiat with your cxhapter. https://hopkinspsychedelic.org/ --U3031433 (discuss • contribs) 05:13, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

Hey Mriganka! Very interesting topic selection, I am looking forward to reading it further. It could be an idea to narrow down some of the substances you have to listen (Ketamine, MDMA), I am not sure if they fall under the category of Psychedelic if that's what you're focusing on. 7:54, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Hey! I thought this article might be helpful to your paper Barrett, F. S., Krimmel, S. R., Griffiths, R., Seminowicz, D. A., & Mathur, B. N. (2020). Psilocybin acutely alters the functional connectivity of the claustrum with brain networks that support perception, memory, and attention. NeuroImage, 116980. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.neuroimage.2020.116980 good luck! [[1]] 13/10/21 4:07 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:52, 16 September 2021 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by reducing the background information and expanding the focus on the interrelationship between the three concepts of interest (psychedelics, consciousness, and personal growth) See earlier comment about Heading casing Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations The main area for improvement going forward is to expand on the interrelationship between the three constructs of interest and to abbreviate background information (e.g., about specific psychedelics). Instead, embedded links can be provided to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles, so that the bulk of this chapter can focus on its specific target. Note that personal growth may include, but should not be restricted to, therapeutic goals. Write using 3rd person perspective For sections which include sub-sections include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Use APA style 7th edition for citations (e.g., do not include author initials) Overview - Consider adding: an image an example or case study Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): under way what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented Captions should include Figure X. ... Captions could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation separate page numbers by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Resources See also Excellent External links Rename links so that they are more user friendly Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:52, 16 September 2021 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a good to very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. Over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. Clear focus question(s). Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth A wide range of relevant theories are well selected, described, explained, and synthesised. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Relevant theory is reasonably well explained. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth and nuance is provided about the selected theory(ies). Useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed, in appropriate detail. Research — Critical thinking Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Excellent critical thinking about research is evident. Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Basic summary. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[2] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar Use serial commas[3] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Direct quotes need page numbers. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures and tables Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Figures are well captioned. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Do not include author initials. Check and correct punctuation for et al. References are not in full APA style. For example: Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Check and correct use of capitalisation[4] Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is good. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). No use of table(s). One use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of examples through specific studies and psychedelic drugs. Social contribution ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit — content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview Display and narrate the correct title and sub-title to help the viewer understand the purpose of the presentation and to be consistent with the book chapter. Establish a context for the topic, to help the viewer understand. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. Include citations. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Audio The audio is hard to follow because so much content is presented so quickly. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., background noise and keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Hide the presentation icons. Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Possibly the images are all from Clipchamp but this is not explicitly stated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:10, 23 November 2021 (UTC)