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Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence
Great to see you on Twitter - include #emot21 with unit-related Twitter posts
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Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure. Concentrate on "the role of pleasure and sexual motivation" (i.e., bring these two concepts together rather than talking about them separately).
Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
Perhaps consider questions such as: What is the source of sexual pleasure? (e.g., to what extent is it physiological vs. psychological?) Why do we experience sexual pleasure? When don't we experience sexual pleasure (and why)? What role does sexual pleasure play in well-being and happiness? etc. What are the downsides of sexual pleasure (e.g., sex obsession/addiction? sexual predatory behaviour? sexual objectification?). How can sexual pleasure be enhanced?
Reeve (2018) is not a primary source - but it can be used to help track down primary sources of interest
Check and remove extra spaces
Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
Use British/Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour)
For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
Overview - Consider adding:
an example or case study
Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
Consider including more examples/case studies
Conclusion (the most important section):
what might the take-home, practical messages be?
in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?