Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Pleasure and sexual motivation

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From u3187741: Hi! You've got some great references and internal links so far but you may want to add this book chapter as well, as it covers a similar topic to yours!

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:56, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. Wording of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence
  2. Great to see you on Twitter - include #emot21 with unit-related Twitter posts
  3. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Headings[edit source]

  1. Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure. Concentrate on "the role of pleasure and sexual motivation" (i.e., bring these two concepts together rather than talking about them separately).
  2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing

Key points[edit source]

  1. Promising development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Perhaps consider questions such as: What is the source of sexual pleasure? (e.g., to what extent is it physiological vs. psychological?) Why do we experience sexual pleasure? When don't we experience sexual pleasure (and why)? What role does sexual pleasure play in well-being and happiness? etc. What are the downsides of sexual pleasure (e.g., sex obsession/addiction? sexual predatory behaviour? sexual objectification?). How can sexual pleasure be enhanced?
  3. Reeve (2018) is not a primary source - but it can be used to help track down primary sources of interest
  4. Check and remove extra spaces
  5. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  6. Use British/Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour)
  7. For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  8. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. focus questions
    2. an image
    3. an example or case study
  9. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  10. Consider including more examples/case studies
  11. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. underway
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. A figure is presented
  2. Caption should include Figure X. ...
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  4. Consider decreasing image size

References[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Check and correct capitalisation (APA style)

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Excellent
    2. Use alphabetical order
  2. External links
    1. Rename links so that they are more user friendly
    2. Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:56, 14 September 2021 (UTC)