Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Persuasion and emotion

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Heading casing[edit source]

Hi Julesrc12. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:21, 26 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]


The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title[edit source]

  1. Title - Excellent
  2. User name was incorrect - have fixed

User page[edit source]

  1. Created - minimal, but sufficient
  2. Consider expanding description about self
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Headings[edit source]

  1. Promising 3-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure.
  2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
  3. The most important section is 4, so expand this.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity)
  2. Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., use FirstAuthor et al., year).
  3. For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings.
  4. Overview:
    1. expand the description of the problem and what will be covered
    2. history - keep it very brief; focus on psychological theory and research
    3. The 3rd focus question is the most important one.
    4. consider adding an image
    5. consider adding an example or case study
  5. Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about emotion and persuasion as separate psychological constructs). Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  6. Reasonable development of key points for most sections, with relevant citations.
  7. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  8. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  9. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. hasn't been developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title?
  10. Cite each reference at least once in the main text.

Figure[edit source]

  1. A figure is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style - but also italicise Figure X. ...
  3. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view.

References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. italicisation
    3. doi formatting

Resources[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. Use bullet-points
    1. Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:22, 2 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Made external links[edit source]

Hey I made you external links for emotion, persuasion, and one of your theories. This will allow your readers to explore topics in more depth and save you words. Good luck! [[1]] 17/10/21 5:52 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
  2. Well under the maximum word count.
  3. The main areas for potential improvement is the quality of written expression. Much of theoretical discussion is abstract and difficult to understand for a lay audience. Rewrite to summarise and provide more practical examples of how the theoretical concepts can be implemented in everyday life.
  4. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Solid Overview.
  2. Consider adding an example of how emotion might be involved in persuasion.
  3. The focus questions could be refined. For example, the first question is unnecessarily broad.

Theory — Breadth[edit source]

  1. There is probably too much general theoretical material (e.g, about emotion). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question).
  2. Relevant theories are selected. The explanation of the theories, however, is quite laborious and abstract.
  3. Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Persuasion).

Theory — Depth[edit source]

  1. Arguably too much depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Tables and/or lists could be used to help clearly summarise key theoretical information.
  3. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts.

Research — Key findings[edit source]

  1. Basic overview of relevant research.
  2. Studies are described one by one. Ideally, synthesise findings across several studies.
  3. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Research — Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Basic critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research

Integration[edit source]

  1. There is basic integration between theory and research.
  2. Theory and research are presented in different sections.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Key points are summarised.
  2. Some practical, take-home message(s) are provided.

Written expression — Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[2] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
    4. Use permanent, rather than relative, time references. For example, instead of "20 years ago", refer to something like "at the beginning of the 21st century". In this way, the text will survive better into the future, without needing to be rewritten.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
  3. Grammar
    1. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[3].
    2. Use serial commas[4] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min).
  4. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Figures
      1. Figure captions use the correct format.
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text.
      3. Refer to each Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
    3. Citations use correct APA style.
    4. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[5]
      2. Include hyperlinked dois

Written expression — Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is basic.
  2. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of image(s).
  5. No use of table(s).
  6. Basic/No use of feature box(es).
  7. Basic use of quiz(zes).
  8. Limited use of case studies or examples
  9. The case studies were research studies.
  10. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
  11. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~2 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:36, 14 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a good presentation.

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest.
  3. A context for the topic is established.
  4. Briefly explain why this topic is important.
  5. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation addresses the topic.
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little.
  4. The presentation is well structured.
  5. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory.
  6. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research.
  7. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with very good take-home message(s).

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow.
  2. Audio communication is clear and well paced.
  3. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  4. Audio recording quality was OK. Review microphone set-up to achieve higher recording quality.
  5. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., keyboard and/or mouse clicks were audible). Consider using an external microphone.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is good.
  2. The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides.
  3. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  4. The amount of text presented per slide should be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  6. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools.

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The correct chapter title and sub-title are missing from the name of the presentation — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:31, 23 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]