Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Optimism bias

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Hey there, I just had a quick look at you book chapter and it looks pretty good! I have gone in and fixed up a few spelling mistakes and added a definition along with a reference. --BlueDreams55 (discusscontribs) 02:07, 7 October 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Hi There,

Just for your topic I have a few articles for your topic that might be useful, the first gives a nice overview on unrealistic optimism and a little bit on optimism bias, which for the most part in the literature I've read at the moment is a term that is often interchangeable. The second article may also go hand in hand with this second article, which is a much more recent version of unrealistic optimism and splits it up as absolute or comparative (file:///Users/ap/Downloads/1-s2.0-S1053810016300782-main.pdf). Lastly, there's an article looking at the neural basis of optimism, which may help to give you some base for your physiological section ( I hope this helps start you off.

Cheers u3203372 AP269 (discusscontribs) 04:40, 25 August 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Hi, I just fixed some typos in your overview section and edited the 'OCD' hyperlink so that it links the whole phrase. I also saw that you have added a quiz to your 'What is Optimism Bias' section and thought it may be helpful if you add these throughout to provide some more interactive features. Nice work and good luck! U3187813 (discusscontribs) 05:06, 15 October 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

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Hi U3187208. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:13, 2 September 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

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Title[edit source]

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User page[edit source]

  1. Created - minimal, but sufficient
  2. Basic description about self
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  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence.

Headings[edit source]

  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  2. Headings are interesting and relevant, providing a good overall structure. Could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Overall, well developed.
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the problem
    2. an image
    3. an example or case study
  3. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  4. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  5. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. hasn't been developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

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  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References[edit source]

  1. Good
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. dois should be active hyperlinks
  3. None

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Move research article to References
  2. External links
    1. Excellent

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Well developed Overview.
  2. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon.
  3. Clear focus question(s).

Theory — Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.

Theory — Depth[edit source]

  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. An excellent balance is struck between the pros and cons of optimism bias.
  3. The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.

Research — Key findings[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed.

Research — Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Excellent critical thinking about research is evident.

Integration[edit source]

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Key points are well summarised.
  2. Clear take-home message(s).

Written expression — Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
    2. "People" is often a better term than "individuals".
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent.
    1. Abbreviations
      1. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
  4. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Figures and tables
      1. APA style is used for Figure captions.
    3. Citations use correct APA style.
    4. References use very good APA style.
      1. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Written expression — Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is very good.
  2. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
  3. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Basic use of image(s).
  5. No use of table(s).
  6. Good use of feature box(es).
  7. Excellent use of quiz(zes).
  8. Good use of case studies or examples.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~10 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation.

Overview[edit source]

  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A context for the topic is established.
  3. Focus questions are presented.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation addresses the topic.
  3. The presentation is well structured.
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory.
  5. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research.
  6. The presentation makes some use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with clear take-home message(s).

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow.
  2. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio.
  3. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. Audio recording quality was reasonably good. Not sure why, but it was a little quiet (I needed volume at near max to hear comfortably).

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is good.
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  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The amount of text presented per slide could be reduced to make it easier to read and listen at the same time.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
  6. The presentation is well produced.

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title and sub-title are not used in the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter.
  4. A link from the book chapter is provided.

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