The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Good on you for having a crack at being bold and making social contributions. As mentioned on your user talk page, however, I think this edit involved changes that weren't necessarily all helpful - so they were rolled back - it would probably be better in this case to make suggestions on the page's discussion. The best contribution is probably the third because a direct link is provided to comments made on a discussion page.
Overall, key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
Key points are lacking at the beginning of sections which branch into sub-sections.
Overview - Consider:
describing the "problem"
expanding around the 3rd focus question and reducing focus on other areas
adding an image
adding an example or case study
For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings.
Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
Consider including more examples/case studies.
Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Promising/interesting research is cited in relation to the relationship between O and PWB. Build out from here (e.g., what theory is relevant to understanding this relationship; what are the implications etc.)
Conclusion (the most important section):
hasn't been developed
what might the take-home, practical messages be?
in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title?
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Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
Rather than direct quotes, it is usually better to communicate concepts in your own words.
The chapter could be improved by developing some of the bullet-points into full paragraph format.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
Layout
Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
Grammar
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words.
Replace double spaces with single spaces.
Figures and tables
Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example.
Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
Check and correct punctuation (e.g., Adler et al., (2017, p. 118) -> Adler et al. (2017, p. 118))
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. # No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Basic use of image(s).
No use of table(s).
Excellent use of feature box(es).
Good use of quiz(zes).
Good use of case studies or examples. Ideally, demonstrate how positive strategies can be used to influence optimism and well-being.
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
The presentation addresses the topic.
An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
The presentation is well structured.
The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The neuroscience could be simplified for a general audience. This could allow more space for discussing relevant psychological research and provide examples.
The presentation makes effective use of animated slides, with text and images.
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. Perhaps the amount of text on the Conclusion slide could be reduced.
