Hey there, your book chapter looks awesome! For your optimism and coping with mental health section, here are a couple of references I found interesting looking at the interaction between optimism and mental health, 'Sharot, T. (2011). The optimism bias. Current Biology, 21(23), 941-R945. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.cub.2011.10.030' and ;Korn, C., Sharot, T., Walter, H., Heekeren, H., & Dolan, R. (2013). Depression is related to an absence of optimistically biased belief updating about future life events. Psychological Medicine, 44(3), 579-592. https://doi.org/10.1017/s0033291713001074' --U3187208 (discuss • contribs) 01:22, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Hey there, thank you very much for this ill have a look and I will see where i can add them :) BlueDreams55 (discuss • contribs) 03:11, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
This is a really interesting subject! I love anything to do with optimism and cannot wait to see your chapter completed. I have provided a different way to present your quote to help it stand out. Hope it helps value add to your chapter.--U3167879 (discuss • contribs) 11:32, 18 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Hey there, I'm very sorry for the late response thank you very much for that it looks so much better! :) BlueDreams55 (discuss • contribs) 03:31, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Hi Boushra! I love your chapter! I always find myself trying to be optimistic about anything and everything. Interesting to see that optimism can be a coping mechanism! I think you might find tragic optimism an interesting topic to include or research. There has been heaps of research over the last two years on the concept due to the COVID-19 pandemic, however it also relates to other trauma as well. Here is a link to an article which defines TO as a trauma treatment! https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/09515070.2019.1633497
--U3187874 (discuss • contribs) 06:19, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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Note that the venture into well-being and mental health could be interesting extra but is arguably alsoout of scope in terms of addressing the topic.
"How has COVID-19 influenced optimism and coping?" can be an interesting case study, especially if you can find relevant research, but treat it as a case study rather than a heading because it is not needed to answer the topic question. Also note to link from here to relevant COVID chapters.
For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings.
Direct quotes should have citations and page numbers.
Avoid overuse of the word "individual".
When introducing the concepts of optimism and coping, link to related chapters for more information, that way the current chapter can focus on their relationship.
The overview paragraphs do a good job of explaining the chapter focus and structure. Probably in that case, the focus questions box isn't needed. Alternatively, abbreviate the paragraphs and expand the focus questions.
Some of the questions about the relationship between optimism and coping are probably unnecessary, but good ones to ask in the initial stages of scoping the topic. The answer could possibly be as simple as considering optimism as one type of coping strategy and then examining the theory and research about optimism as coping strategy - how well does it work, when doesn't it work so well etc. There is the possibility here too of renegotiating the sub-title if you can think of a better one for explaining the relation between optimism and coping.
Expand theory and research.
Conclusion (the most important section):
hasn't been developed
what might the take-home, practical messages be?
in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title?
Cite each reference at least once in the main text.
I've read through your page after seeing your request for feedback on the discussion page. Generally, I think you page looks quite good. However, I would suggest expanding some sections. Particularly the definitions of optimism and coping are very short and academic. Could you expand on them at all, maybe with a real world example for each? Your conclusion also feels quite abrupt and limited, could you expand this do you think?
I would also suggest going through and checking for active vs passive language. Personally, I write a lot in passive voice, but the active voice has more flow and can be understood better. Here (external link to Walden University) is a good guide to academic active voice.
I hope this was helpful.
The chapter starts focusing on the relationship between optimism and coping about half-way through. This indicates that there is too much preamble.
Applied examples are useful, but the chapter tries to cover too much theoretical territory (e.g., 1. no real need to cover gender differences - but if it is to be covered, what's the theory about why there might be gender differences in the relationship between optimism and coping? 2. The discussion about biological aspects of coping seemed irrelevant as it wasn't related to optimism).
Overall, this chapter provides basic depth about the psychological theory explaining the relationship between optimism and coping. Most of the focus in on explaining coping as a stand-alone concept and optimism as a stand-alone concept. There is a lack of sufficient focus on theory about how optimism functions as a coping strategy.
The chapter seems to assume that the relationship between optimism and coping is positive. But aren't there situations where optimism is not a good coping strategy (e.g., unrealistic optimism can undermine motivation for health screening).
Did you consult Cannon (1929)? If not, this should be cited as a secondary source.
The main areas for potential improvement are to reduce the length of the sentences, remove weasel words, and improve grammar.
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.