Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Nature and psychological distress

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created Add "About me" heading Consider linking to your eportfolio Description about self provided Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Use a numbered list. Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Consider including more of your Twitter posts as they are actively contributing to the Motivation and Emotion discussion even if they aren't all about book chapters per se Section headings Appropriate to the topic. Probably over-developed heading structure - will need to be more selective. Aim to have no more than six sub-headings within a section - if more, either be more selective or consider using a next level of sub-heading. Key points Partially complete. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Remove or adapt generic template content. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Consider including more examples/case studies. Use APA style for citations. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. Consider decreasing image size from default. References Good. For full APA style, use: correct capitalisation the new recommended format for dois Resources See also Excellent Use bullet-points External links Excellent Use bullet-points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:27, 12 September 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title Excellent User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. However, too much is covered, so prune it down and consider integrating/merging some sections. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts (e.g., what is psychological distress) and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. There is no need to cover physical effects (unless they are being explained as causal factors) because the focus of the chapter is the effects of nature on psychological distress. Also remember to consider that nature can have negative effects e.g., due to climate change, natural disasters etc. but just mention this briefly because the topic is "How can nature help people deal with psychological distress?" Key points Key points are developed for some sections, but not others. Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., use FirstAuthor et al., year). For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings. Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered an example or case study The most important sections are 4.1: "Psychological effects" and 5: "Psychological theories". Expand these sections, plus the Overview and Conclusion. Consider including more case studies. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Conclusion: hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Figure Excellent Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi formatting Resources See also Missing External links Excellent Use bullet-points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:19, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Engaging Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Key citations are well used. Some citations are missing (see ). Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Good critical thinking about research is evident. Perhaps consider potential limitations/risks/disadvantages of nature exposure. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Clear take-home messages. Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good. Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). APA style Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Figures are very well captioned. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Do not include author initials. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[3] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is excellent. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Excellent/Very good/Good/Basic/One/No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Excellent use of image(s). No use of table(s). Excellent use of feature box(es). Excellent use of quiz(zes). Excellent use of case studies or examples. Social contribution ~40 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:09, 9 November 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. Overview An opening slide with the title is presented and narrated. Also include the sub-title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Focus questions are presented. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section. The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. Check and correct spelling (e.g., evolutionarily -> evolutionary; colleuges -> colleagues). Useful practical strategies. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic take-home message. Audio The audio is easy to follow. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes good use of animated slides with text and images. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is well produced. Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the presentation description but not in the meta-data.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:17, 20 November 2021 (UTC)