Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Interest

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded Capitalisation of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence Headings It makes logical sense to use the sub-title questions as stop-level headings. Consider further development of sub-headings in those sections. Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info Overview - Consider adding: a description of the problem and what will be covered an image an example or case study For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Use a maximum of three citations per point Use British/Australian spelling (e.g., analyze -> analyse; behavior -> behaviour) Move references into the References section. Keep citations in the main body. There seems to be reasonably good coverage of theory; strive to balance with review of relevant research Consider including more examples/case studies Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented Caption should include Figure X. ... Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text Cite each figure at least once in the main text References Good For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation doi formatting Resources See also Excellent External links One of the links is broken The other link is not publicly accessible

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:27, 12 September 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an very good. Overview An opening slide with the title and sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest. A context for the topic is established. The importance of this topic is explained. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Focus questions are presented. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s). Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Excellent intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was excellent. Maybe it could work better to have most of the citations in text rather than narrated. Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are all from PowToon but this is not explicitly stated. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:30, 21 November 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:54, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Chapter marks will be available via UCLearn along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Basic Overview. Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided. Theory — Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Did you consult citations such as (Arnold, 1910; Dewey, 1913)? If not, they should be cited as a secondary sources. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Basic overview of relevant research. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Integration There is basic integration between theory and research. Conclusion Basic summary. Address the focus questions. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Layout Headings should use default wiki style (e.g., I've removed additional large size). See earlier comments about heading casing. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. Here's an explanatory video (1 min). Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Interest -> interest; Psychologists -> psychologists). APA style Replace double spaces with single spaces. Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159). Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Figure captions use the correct format. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). Excessive use of feature box(es) has been removed. No use of quiz(zes). Basic/No use of case studies or examples. Basic use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Irrelevant use of external links in the "External links" section - links have been removed. Social contribution ~2 logged, useful, minor social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:54, 22 November 2021 (UTC)