Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Healthy risk-taking

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Hi, this article may be useful for helping you frame the concept of healthy risk-taking. (The meaning of risk-taking – key concepts and dimensions, 2019 by Jens O. Zinn). It discusses how level of control and motives interact to have an outcome on risk-taking behaviour.

Another interesting article regarding risk-taking in adolescents due to parenting styles (Retrospective Paternal and Maternal Parenting Styles, Regulatory Self-Efficacy and Adolescent Risk Taking, 2018 by Olivari., et al)

Hope this helps, good luck.

--Leeeeanne (discusscontribs) 01:04, 24 August 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Hi, very interesting book chapter! I would suggest moving some of your links (those not linking to Wikiversity book chapters or Wikipedia articles) in the " See also" section to a "External link" section. All the best! --U3196787 (discusscontribs) 13:22, 11 October 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Hi, your book chapter is really interesting! I am writing about developmental changes in emotion regulation and came across this article which might be of use to you! Specifically in relation to how the presence of a parent can mediate risk taking behaviour in childhood! I have included the full APA reference so you can find the article easily. Hope this helps and good luck!

Martin, R., & Ochsner, K. (2016). The neuroscience of emotion regulation development: implications for education. Current Opinion In Behavioral Sciences, 10, 142-148. U3187813 (discusscontribs) 01:03, 15 October 2021 (UTC)Reply[reply]

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User page[edit source]

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  7. Conclusion (the most important section):
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    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
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References[edit source]

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Resources[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

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Overview[edit source]

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