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Hi, this article may be useful for helping you frame the concept of healthy risk-taking. (The meaning of risk-taking – key concepts and dimensions, 2019 by Jens O. Zinn). It discusses how level of control and motives interact to have an outcome on risk-taking behaviour.
Another interesting article regarding risk-taking in adolescents due to parenting styles (Retrospective Paternal and Maternal Parenting Styles, Regulatory Self-Efficacy and Adolescent Risk Taking, 2018 by Olivari., et al)
Hi, very interesting book chapter! I would suggest moving some of your links (those not linking to Wikiversity book chapters or Wikipedia articles) in the " See also" section to a "External link" section. All the best! --U3196787 (discuss • contribs) 13:22, 11 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Hi, your book chapter is really interesting! I am writing about developmental changes in emotion regulation and came across this article which might be of use to you! Specifically in relation to how the presence of a parent can mediate risk taking behaviour in childhood! I have included the full APA reference so you can find the article easily. Hope this helps and good luck!
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Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
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Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Many aspects are excellent, but more thorough proofreading is needed to fix grammatical errors, in particular.
Reduce use of weasel words (e.g., "is said to") which bulk out the text, but don't enhance meaning.
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One use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
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