Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Growth needs

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Hey Michael, it's Luke (U3198823), I was just reading through your current draft and it is looking good so far, but I thought I should link you to some extra resources that may help slingshot you into action. I've listed some resources discussing a couple of theoretical conversations by Carol Dweck on growth and fixed mindsets. They are quite interesting as they cover different mentalities that can be bred from birth and how they can impact particular motivational drivers throughout our lives. I'll also link you to some journal articles that are peer-reviewed that also cover this particular theory. I hope this helps you in general and in your later assignments.

All the best, Luke :)


Video resources:

Developing a Growth Mindset with Carol Dweck:

The Power of believing that you can improve, by Carol Dweck:

The Growth Mindset | Carol Dweck | Talks at Google:

Peer-Reviewed Journals:

Mindsets: A View From Two Eras:

The Choice to Make a Difference:

(Just added a Blog with a quick summary if you are short on time)

Carol Dweck: A Summary of Growth and Fixed Mindsets:

Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence
  2. Add your signature to comments on talk/discussion pages

Headings[edit source]

  1. Promising 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development by expanding the structure. Consider using more descriptive headings and expanding the sub-heading structure.
  2. The general section on motivation probably isn't needed (just briefly introduce the general concept and link to other chapters or Wikipedia for more info), so that the chapter can concentrate on growth need motivation.
  3. Good to explain needs, physical vs. psychological, with the emphasis on psychological as these are more related to psychological growth.
  4. Perhaps consider moving Maslow's hierarchy and Alderfer's ERG theory up as they are useful starting points that distinguish growth needs.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Good development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
  2. Work on the logical flow/structure - so there is a narrative/story.
  3. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words
  4. For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  5. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the "problem"
    2. an image
  6. Theory looks to be well covered. Where theory is discussed, consider how to balance with this reviewing relevant research.
  7. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  8. Consider including more examples/case studies
  9. Good idea to use a table
  10. Good see a critical perspective (Criticisms/limitations). This can be a separate section or embedded throughout.
  11. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. underway - as your knowledge develops, strive to make this section more specific
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. Well done on creating and uploading your own image.
  2. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  4. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view

References[edit source]

  1. Avoid secondary citations (e.g., Reeve textbook) - instead go to the primary sources.
  2. Are all citations in the Reference list?
  3. Make sure to identify and make use of recent work in this area e.g.,,5
  4. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. italicisation
    2. doi formatting (links should be active/clickable)

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Excellent
    2. There must be better (more relevant) external resources?

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:54, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Reasonable Overview, but the quality of written expression could be improved (e.g,. see suggested edits).
  2. Consider adding a case study or example to help engage reader interest.
  3. Clear focus question(s).
  4. The reflection exercise may be better in the main body.

Theory — Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theory is well selected (e.g., hierarchy of needs, growth mindset).
  2. Tables and figures help to conceptualise key points about theory.
  3. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.

Theory — Depth[edit source]

  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Key citations are well used.
  3. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information.
  4. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts.

Research — Key findings[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is cited and reviewed.
  2. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Research — Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Critical thinking about research is reasonably good.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. suggesting specific directions for future research

Integration[edit source]

  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.
  2. The chapter places more emphasis on theory than research.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Key points are summarised.
  2. Clear take-home messages.

Written expression — Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good to very good.
    2. "People" is often a better term than "individuals".
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are very good.
    1. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname.
    2. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[1]
      2. Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)

Written expression — Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is very good.
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
  3. One use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
  4. Excellent creation and use of image(s).
  5. Excellent use of table(s).
  6. Excellent use of feature box(es).
  7. Excellent use of quiz(zes).
  8. Basic use of case studies or examples.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~20 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:09, 2 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good presentation.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Present and narrate the title and sub-title on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A context for the topic is established.
  3. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages.

Content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section.
  2. The presentation addresses the topic.
  3. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  4. The presentation is well structured.
  5. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory.
  6. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research.
  7. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
  8. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. A Conclusion is presented with a clear, positive take-home message.
  2. The Conclusion is slightly cut-off at the end.

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced.
  4. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  5. Audio recording quality was very good.
  6. Consider muting the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of Moovly, with overlaid text.
  3. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time.
  4. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  5. The presentation is very well produced.

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The full chapter title and sub-title are not used in the name of the presentation - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:29, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]