Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Fear of driving

Topic development feedback

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Title Excellent User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Brief description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development to limit the focus on background information and expand the focus on the target topic. Key points It looks like a lot of proofreading will be needed. Consider getting assistance (e.g., ask for assistance from others students and/or Studiosity). Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., use FirstAuthor et al., year). For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings. Overview - Consider adding: excellent case study and description of the problem an image Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Perhaps consider how other variables, such as mobile phones or presence of a passenger etc. interact with the fear of driving - e.g., how do they influence the fear for better or worse? Good balance of theory and research. Expand theory and research. Good development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Figure A figure is presented. For APA style, check and correct capitalisation. Caption should include Figure X. ... Expand caption to link image more clearly with the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: capitalisation italicisation doi Resources See also Excellent External links Move academic article into References

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:21, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

Student Help

Hi there! Interesting topic. Extremely relatable as most of us drive! I have just one suggestion for you!

Under your main heading "Fear of driving", have you considered adding subtitles for each reason? For example, - Negative fear of the past - Influence of emotion - Distraction

That could help split up the information!

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview The sub-title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation as well provide focus questions which can lead to take away messages. This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest. A context for the topic is established. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. More focus on how FoD can be managed would be ideal. Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Audio The audio is easy to follow and interesting to listen to. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio. Audio communication is clear and well paced. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video Overall, visual display quality is very good. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication could be improved by including more relevant images and/or diagrams. The presentation is well produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are all from PowToon but this is not explicitly stated. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:23, 21 November 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:45, 24 November 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Well developed Overview. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or example and/or using an image. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory. Build more strongly on other fear-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Fear). Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts. Research — Key findings Relevant research is well reviewed. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Good critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are well summarised. Clear take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. "People" is often a better term than "individuals". Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: Layout Grammar The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e., et al., etc.). Proofreading Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Psychologist -> psychologist). More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Tables Table captions use APA style. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is very good. Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Good use of feature box(es). Good use of quiz(zes). Very good use of case studies or examples. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~2 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:45, 24 November 2021 (UTC)