Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
This is an interesting topic for sure, so good luck with the writing! As a thought, perhaps the 'sexual fantasy' section might fit better as the first thing discussed in the chapter? That way you might not have to double up on the explanations for 'sexual motivation' and the varying theories. As for pictures, maybe try something from the 'sexual fantasy' page on Wikipedia? A fair few of the ones on that page re public domain. Finally, I don't know if this source would help (https://journals.sagepub.com/doi/abs/10.1177/0146167218789611) but it might be useful if you are looking for recent studies - it should be possible to get a full copy through the UC library access. --U3020459 (discuss • contribs) 14:24, 28 August 2021 (UTC)Reply
From U3187741: Hi! I noticed that you don't have this book chapter linked on your chapter. It may be beneficial as it is a similar topic and pleasure can be derived from sexual fantasies!
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hey! Really great chapter! Just a few editing notes, your intext references are bolded (not sure if this is because you’re still working on the chapter) and don’t need to be, also there is overuse of italics, italics should only be used when referring to a specific theory, however in APA and for this textbook are not required. The italics often lead to confusion as to the actual importance of the concept. Might also be worth externally linking some of the terms, wiki has multiple different pages on it, such as this one on sexual fantasy https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sexual_fantasy.
Also might be useful to use more external links, see this article on how the science of sexual desire can improve your sex life https://goop.com/wellness/sexual-health/how-the-science-of-sexual-desire-can-improve-your-sex-life/. Or others like it!
--U3187874 (discuss • contribs) 02:32, 17 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Wow - this is shaping to be a tour de force. It is likely that this will hit the maximum word count, so be OK with abbreviating background material (e.g., what is sexual motivation) or related but not essential topics.
Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations.
For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings.
Latest comment: 3 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
Hi! You topic is really interesting and seems like you have a lot of information about it already! I have just added an internal wiki link to get you started as I saw you had none! Hope this helps you get started! --U3204694 (discuss • contribs) 11:14, 30 September 2021 (UTC)Reply
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
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Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Figures and tables
Use sentence casing for Figure captions.
Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
Citations use correct APA style.
References are not in full APA style. For example:
Overall, the use of learning features is very good.
Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Very good use of image(s).
No use of table(s).
Basic use of feature box(es).
Very good use of quiz(zes).
The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
Latest comment: 2 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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The presentation addresses the topic reasonably well.
Good coverage of sexual motivation, but this takes 2 minutes, only leaving 1 minute to cover sexual fantasy. Ideally, flip this around (i.e., 1 min on sexual motivation and 2 min on sexual fantasy).
An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory.
The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research.
The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.
The presentation provides easy to understand information.
The chapter title but not the sub-title is used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
A simple written description of the presentation is provided.