Hi! I really like your topic. I wanted to suggest including a paragraph on self-care of employees during COVID shutdown/lockdown periods. I think this could be extremely useful to explore how employers are keeping up moral away from the workplace. I know my workplace has done this by sending out 'care packages' and organising virtual (zoom) drinks/catch-ups. I think that this is a great way to increase wellbeing and could be useful to mention as an alternating approach. I have provided a link to an NSW health article that has distributed over 2000 care packages during their state lockdown.
https://www.slhd.nsw.gov.au/sydneyconnect/story-Special-COVID-19-CarePackages.html --U3204463 (discuss • contribs) 09:44, 17 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
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The most promising/useful section is "How can we promote & encourage self-care?". Consider expanding/building the chapter around this section.
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Hi there! Great work so far. I just have a few suggestions to make that could improve your book chapter:
1. I think it could enhance the appearance of your book chapter by adding some colour. So for your focus questions you could present them in a coloured box, rather than just black and white
2. I think it would be beneficial if you interacted with the readers and included some case studies and/or quizzes
3. It would be interesting to see what theories relate to your topic. I found this article here which expresses some theories related to employee motivation to get you started: https://journals.sagepub.com/doi/abs/10.1177/014920638901500210?casa_token=6oFEFegKLk8AAAAA:NFiVhrMwwP-lUM4pkN35mkMm5IAVRxqBLG9beF_kl9NZpJytuwxbGW6j1sz_9m77t0TZSoA23c86hA The article is called Self Theories and Employee Motivation
I hope you find my suggestions useful and find the article interesting.
Thank you --U3202023 (discuss • contribs) 06:26, 6 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Hi,
Looks like you have a great start here. I would like to echo the previous suggestion of adding quizzes into your work. They are a great way of engaging the reader. I have included some sample code here for you. If you go to "edit source" you can copy this code into your own page and then change the text throughs he normal editor.
I also think adding a link to Vicarious trauma could be useful, this particularly affects people who work in care and mental health settings, and is a great example of why we need good self-care.
Cheers,
JediClass
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