Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Employee self-care motivation

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Social contributions[edit source]

Hey! This is such a great topic, I feel it needs to be implemented even more now that we are in a pandemic too! I found an interesting YouTube video you could use as an external link: Mental Health in the Workplace | Promoting Wellness and Self Care - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=t8vPEs65QCY&ab_channel=Vyond, keen to read this when it's done! --Eilish Ritchie (discusscontribs) 07:52, 17 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hi! I really like your topic. I wanted to suggest including a paragraph on self-care of employees during COVID shutdown/lockdown periods. I think this could be extremely useful to explore how employers are keeping up moral away from the workplace. I know my workplace has done this by sending out 'care packages' and organising virtual (zoom) drinks/catch-ups. I think that this is a great way to increase wellbeing and could be useful to mention as an alternating approach. I have provided a link to an NSW health article that has distributed over 2000 care packages during their state lockdown. https://www.slhd.nsw.gov.au/sydneyconnect/story-Special-COVID-19-CarePackages.html --U3204463 (discusscontribs) 09:44, 17 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing[edit source]

I have provided an example of how to format references, using your three references, in accordance with APA (please see second reference list).--U3167879 (discusscontribs) 12:21, 19 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:04, 16 September 2021 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title[edit source]

  1. The title is correctly worded
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded
  3. Capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents
  4. Capitalisation of the sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page[edit source]

  1. Used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. External link provided to book chapter - changed to internal link

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with link(s) to evidence

Headings[edit source]

  1. Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure
  2. See earlier comment about Heading casing

Key points[edit source]

  1. The most promising/useful section is "How can we promote & encourage self-care?". Consider expanding/building the chapter around this section.
  2. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  3. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. what will be covered
    2. adjust focus questions to address the sub-title topic: How can employers promote and encourage employee self-care?
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  4. Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population
  5. Avoid overcapitalisation (APA style) - more info
  6. Basic development of key points for most sections, with relevant citations
  7. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  8. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. This is particularly important for this chapter as there are several other chapters about closely related concepts.
  9. Consider including more examples/case studies
  10. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. hasn't been developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title?

Figure[edit source]

  1. A figure is presented
  2. Caption should use APA style e.g., include Figure X. ...
  3. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  5. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view

References[edit source]

  1. Move non-academic sources to the External links section
  2. Use APA style (or wiki referencing style)

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. OK
    2. Have adjusted to fit style guide
  2. External links
    1. OK
    2. Have adjusted to fit style guide

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:04, 16 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

Suggestions[edit source]

Hi there! Great work so far. I just have a few suggestions to make that could improve your book chapter: 1. I think it could enhance the appearance of your book chapter by adding some colour. So for your focus questions you could present them in a coloured box, rather than just black and white 2. I think it would be beneficial if you interacted with the readers and included some case studies and/or quizzes 3. It would be interesting to see what theories relate to your topic. I found this article here which expresses some theories related to employee motivation to get you started: https://journals.sagepub.com/doi/abs/10.1177/014920638901500210?casa_token=6oFEFegKLk8AAAAA:NFiVhrMwwP-lUM4pkN35mkMm5IAVRxqBLG9beF_kl9NZpJytuwxbGW6j1sz_9m77t0TZSoA23c86hA The article is called Self Theories and Employee Motivation I hope you find my suggestions useful and find the article interesting. Thank you --U3202023 (discusscontribs) 06:26, 6 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Quizzes and a topic suggestion[edit source]

Hi, Looks like you have a great start here. I would like to echo the previous suggestion of adding quizzes into your work. They are a great way of engaging the reader. I have included some sample code here for you. If you go to "edit source" you can copy this code into your own page and then change the text throughs he normal editor.

Quiz 1 - This is a simple quiz:

True
False


I also think adding a link to Vicarious trauma could be useful, this particularly affects people who work in care and mental health settings, and is a great example of why we need good self-care. Cheers, JediClass

Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Add and narrate an initial title/sub-title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  2. Briefly explain why this topic is important.
  3. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages.

Content[edit source]

  1. The presentation addresses the topic.
  2. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  3. The presentation makes very good use of relevant psychological theory.
  4. The presentation makes little use of relevant psychological research.
  5. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.

Audio[edit source]

  1. The audio is easy to follow.
  2. The presentation makes good use of narrated audio.
  3. Audio communication is clear and well paced.
  4. Good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement.
  5. Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech.
  6. Audio recording quality was very good.

Video[edit source]

  1. Overall, visual display quality is good.
  2. The presentation makes basic use of animated slides.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams.
  5. The presentation is well produced using PowToon.

Meta-data[edit source]

  1. The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A written description of the presentation is not provided.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided.

Licensing[edit source]

  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Probably the images are all from PowToon but this is not explicitly stated.
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:41, 21 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
  2. Well over the maximum word count.
  3. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter.
  4. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Overview[edit source]

  1. Solid Overview.
  2. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon.
  3. Clear focus question(s).
  4. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest.

Theory — Breadth[edit source]

  1. Relevant theory is reasonably well explained.
  2. Summarise the background, general theory because the chapter is over the maximum word count.

Theory — Depth[edit source]

  1. Good depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Some useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts.
  3. Australia can be used as a case study, but the chapter should address an international audience.

Research — Key findings[edit source]

  1. Basic overview of relevant research.
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal.
  3. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Research — Critical thinking[edit source]

  1. Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. discussing the direction of relationships
    3. considering the strength of relationships
    4. acknowledging limitations
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  3. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).

Integration[edit source]

  1. There is basic integration between theory and research.

Conclusion[edit source]

  1. Missing

Written expression — Style[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is good.
    2. Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population.
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    2. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance.
    2. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
  4. Proofreading
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation.
  5. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers — even better, write in your own words.
    3. Figures
      1. Figure captions should use this format: Figure X. Descriptive caption in sentence casing. See example.
      2. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    4. Tables
      1. Table captions should use APA style. See example.
      2. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1).
    5. Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses.
    6. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Use alphabetical order.
      2. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
      3. Check and correct use of capitalisation[1]
      4. Check and correct use of italicisation

Written expression — Learning features[edit source]

  1. Overall, the use of learning features is good.
  2. No use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. Basic use of image(s).
  4. Good use of table(s).
  5. Good use of feature box(es).
  6. No use of quiz(zes).
  7. Very good use of case studies or examples.
  8. Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
  9. Good use of external links in the "External links" section.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. No logged social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:04, 24 November 2021 (UTC)Reply