Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Emotions and security investing

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:38, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with link(s) to evidence. Headings Promising, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Key points are developed for each section, except the Conclusion Overview - Consider adding: a description of what will be covered focus questions an image an example or case study Promising use of theory. Expand review of relevant research. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Cite each reference at least once in the main text. Conclusion (the most important section): hasn't been developed what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title? Figure None References Incomplete APA referencing style= Resources None

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:38, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview An opening slide with the sub-title is presented and narrated - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The title is missing on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content The presentation addresses the topic. There is too much content for the time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to cover a small amount of well-targetted content than a large amount of poorly selected content. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes no use of relevant psychological research. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies. No citations or references are used. Conclusion The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit. Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Basic intonation. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Audio recording quality was poor. Sounds like the narrator is at the far end of a tin can? Keyboard/mouse clicks audible. Consider using an external microphone. The narrated content doesn't provide a sufficient synthesis of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic. Video Overall, visual display quality is very basic. The presentation makes basic use of text-based slides. There is a lot of blank space on the slides. The font size could be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images and/or diagrams. The presentation is basically produced using simple tools. Hide the audio icon. The visual content lacks sufficient detail to be an adequate synthesis of the best available psychological theory and research about the topic. Meta-data Use the correct chapter title and sub-title for the name of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is not provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. A link to the book chapter is not provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:37, 21 November 2021 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. The main areas for potential improvement are to: Provide more detailed citation to support claims Review and integrate more psychological research Provide more practical examples For additional feedback, see the following comments and [ these copyedits]. Overview Basic Overview. Too long. Move detailed content in subsequent sections. The purpose of the Overview is to briefly explain the topic, engage reader interest, and establish focus questions for the chapter. Add focus questions in a feature box to help guide the reader and structure the chapter. Consider introducing a case study or example or using an image to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Basic but sufficient coverage of relevant theory is provided. Insufficient use of psychological theory about this topic. Build more strongly on other money-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Money). Theory — Depth Basic depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Did you consult Commons (1934)? If not, this should be cited as a secondary source. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Research — Key findings Insufficient use of relevant psychological research. It is surprising to read a behavioural economics topic that doesn't cite the work of Kahneman. More detail about key studies would be ideal. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Insufficient critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Insufficient integration of theory and research. Conclusion Insufficient as a cohesive summary of what the best available psychological theory and research has to say about the topic of self-regulation. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Use gender-neutral language (e.g., his -> their). Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers - even better, write in your own words. Figures Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: Remove italics. Do not include author initials. References are not in APA style. Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is insufficient. Basic use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). No use of table(s). No use of feature box(es). Basic use of quiz(zes). No use of case studies or examples. No use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. No use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution No logged social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:28, 22 November 2021 (UTC)