Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Domestic violence motivation

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Hello! this is a really interesting topic Good job on all your work so far. I noticed you only had one external source so i found this article that could be interesting (link here: https://www.verywellmind.com/domestic-abuse-why-do-they-do-it-62639 ). Good luck finishing your chapter :) U3203008 (discuss • contribs)

An empirical explanation for the motivation of domestic violence against women with evidence from Harway & O’Neil(1999) notes that biological explanation of men's violence is due to genetics, brain dysfunction factors, endocrine and neurotransmitter. So early aggressive behaviour is predicted in later aggressive acts including physical aggression, criminal behaviour, spouse or child abuse. Other associations of motivating behaviour explained (Yllo, 2001) and (O'NEIL & HARWAY, 1997) is alcohol abuse, coercive communication and anger expression.--SihTosam (discuss • contribs) --SihTosam (discuss • contribs) 08:46, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

O'NEIL, J., & HARWAY, M. (1997). A Multivariate Model Explaining Men's Violence Toward Women. Violence Against Women, 3(2), 182-203. https://doi.org/10.1177/1077801297003002005

O’Neil, J. M., & Harway, M. (1999). What causes men’s violence against women? Sage Publications.

Yllo, K. (2001). What Causes Men's Violence against Women?: What Causes Men's Violence against Women?. American Anthropologist, 103(2), 574-575. https://doi.org/10.1525/aa.2001.103.2.574

Hi, here is a TED talk about 'Why domestic violence victims don't leave' which might be interesting and useful for your book chapter:https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V1yW5IsnSjo. Kind regards --U3196787 (discuss • contribs) 08:45, 14 October 2021 (UTC)

Hey there, here's an Australian government resource full of statistics regarding rates of domestic violence here which might be useful to include in your chapter; Australian Institute of Health and Welfare 2019. Family, domestic and sexual violence in Australia: continuing the national story 2019. Cat. no. FDV 3. Canberra: AIHW. https://www.aihw.gov.au/getmedia/b0037b2d-a651-4abf-9f7b-00a85e3de528/aihw-fdv3-FDSV-in-Australia-2019.pdf.aspx?inline=true --U3187208 (discuss • contribs) 01:39, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi, I really enjoyed reading this chapter and noticed as this is a late social contribution that perhaps you are looking for some external links. This is a Ted talk on "A Mile in Her Shoes: Changing perspective on domestic violence": https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wLNa6qwVpbA&ab_channel=TEDxTalks hope this is useful! --Eilish Ritchie (discuss • contribs) 07:26, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Hey! I really enjoyed reading your topic. It can be such a hard thing to comment on due to the sensitive nature of the topic. I though you might find this external like useful https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V1yW5IsnSjo Goodluck! [Minikin] 17/10/21 6:41 (UTC)

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