Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Dispositional optimism

Heading casing

Hi U3211849. FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:01, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

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Title Good Capitalisation of the title and sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created - minimal, but sufficient Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Use a numbered list. Headings The overall structure/direction is good. The 3-level structure may be overly complicated - consider simplifying. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Well developed key points for most sections. For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings. Overview - Consider adding: an example or case study Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Use APA style 7th edition for citations with three or more authors (i.e., use FirstAuthor et al., year). Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section): minimal development what might the take-home, practical messages be? in a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question in the sub-title? Figure A figure is presented. Caption should include Figure X. ... Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text (e.g., how is happiness related to optimism?). Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References OK For APA referencing style, check and correct: alphabetical order italicisation doi formatting Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:01, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Hi! Here is an interesting ted talk about optimism, which might be useful for your book chapter: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mZbzrtnvMjs. All the best--U3196787 (discuss • contribs) 16:36, 11 October 2021 (UTC)

Hello! I'm not sure how close you are to finishing your chapter, but I found this article which explicitly talks about dispositional optimism, access it through your UC account log in! Good luck!! -- Joekon200029 (discuss • Special:Contributions/Joekon200029\contribs) 14:56, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes. Overview Add and narrate an initial title/sub-title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation. This presentation has an introduction that aims to hook audience interest. Briefly explain why this topic is important. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. Content The presentation addresses the topic. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological theory. The presentation makes good use of relevant psychological research. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with basic take-home message(s). The Conclusion only partially fitted within the time limit. Audio The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio. Audio recording quality was OK. Probably an on-board microphone was used (e.g., a bit fuzzy). Consider using an external microphone. There are quite a few static glitches. Video Overall, visual display quality is basic. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides. The slides contain a lot of blank space - it is not clear why. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time. The visual communication is supplemented by images and/or diagrams. The presentation is produced using simple tools. Meta-data The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used in the name of the presentation - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. A written description of the presentation is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding. Links to and from the book chapter are provided. Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the presentation description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.

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Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes reasonably good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Overview Solid Overview. No need to focus on specific measures. Explains the problem or phenomenon. Clear focus question(s). Consider introducing a case study or example to help engage reader interest. Theory — Breadth Relevant theory is reasonably well explained. Build more strongly on other optimism-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Optimism). Theory — Depth Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies). Tables and/or lists are used to help clearly convey key theoretical information. More examples could be useful to illustrate key concepts. Place more emphasis on explaining the underlying theoretical constructs than methods of measurement. Research — Key findings Relevant research is reviewed. There is too much emphasis on explaining one particularly measurement tool. Instead, review research that is directly related to the sub-title and focus questions. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Research — Critical thinking Basic critical thinking about research is evident. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by: describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies discussing the direction of relationships considering the strength of relationships acknowledging limitations suggesting specific directions for future research Many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Integration Discussion of theory and research is well integrated. Conclusion Key points are summarised. Add practical, take-home message(s). Written expression — Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As shown below"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes. Layout Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections. See earlier comments about heading casing. Check and correct use of that vs. who. Grammar Minor - the grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Grammar-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages. Another option is to share draft work with peers and ask for their assistance. Spelling Minor - Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures Figures are well captioned. Figure captions use the correct format. Refer to each Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). Tables Table captions use close to APA style. Refer to each Table at least once within the main text (e.g., see Table 1). Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation[2] Check and correct use of italicisation Page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-) Include hyperlinked dois Written expression — Learning features Overall, the use of learning features is basic. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of image(s). Good use of table(s). Basic use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Basic use of case studies or examples. Good use of interwiki links in the "See also" section. Basic use of external links in the "External links" section. Social contribution ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:52, 22 November 2021 (UTC)