Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2021/Achievement motivation and attribution theory

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Hi, great work so far on developing your topic. Here a few handy tips to help you along.

  • Putting a box around focus questions will help them stand out better. Following up with the answers to focus questions at the end will show your understanding of the topic and is a great way to summarise the chapter. Add a dot point to the last question to ensure consistency.
  • Figure 1 - caption could be clear to link in with topic e.g. 'proof of achievement for some is about winning'
  • Bracket placed around in text citation Vaughn & Hogg, 2018.
  • Edited line áttributee those findings, previously over two paragraphs.
  • Remember to take out your working notes
  • Add information under subheadings such as false consensus
  • Some sentences left unfinished.
  • I removed information about feature boxes
  • Link to key terms when first mentioned, I added one for fundamental attribution
  • Add more images to create interest and to break up the information on your page.

--U3186377 (discusscontribs) 21:01, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit source]

Hi there, that would be great if you could cite your key points with peer-reviewed research.--U3195440 (discusscontribs) 23:09, 29 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit source]

Hello, firstly you've done a great job on your book chapter so far, but I just noticed in your overview that there were two incomplete sentences, I have re-wrote it for you if you wish you use this instead: Motivation is a broad concept in psychology, one which has many theoretical and practical implications. This book chapter will focus specifically on achievement motivation, and the chapter also discusses what defines achievement motivation and how it falls under the broader concept of motivation. The referenced research and theories aim to answer how attributions affect achievement motivation by delving into defining attributions and exploring attribution theory.

Hopefully, this is helpful :) --U3065868 (discusscontribs) 08:47, 12 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit source]

Hi there. I found your topic interesting, and especially some of the subheadings. I have found an article particularly about self serving bias, a section that I saw you have not yet completed. I hope it might be able to help you in finishing this section. The title is called: Immune to Situation: The Self-Serving Bias in Unambiguous Contexts, with a link here: --U3127020 (discusscontribs) 03:47, 14 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent - used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Very good
  2. Suggestion: The link to evidence can be to a comparison which shows changes from multiple edits to a page - just choose which two versions of the page to compare.

Headings[edit source]

  1. Promising 2-level heading structure - but would benefit from further development by expanding the structure for the most important section (#4) and reducing the amount of planned background content (about achievement and attribution as separate constructs (#2 and #3 respectively).
  2. The Overview and Conclusion should not have sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Basic development of key points for some sections, with a lack of relevant citations.
  2. Write using 3rd person perspective.
  3. Overview - Consider:
    1. avoid being so general (e.g., about "motivation") and focus more specifically on the main topic (i.e., the sub-title).
    2. providing a description of the problem and what will be covered
    3. focus questions - keep #1 and #3 - remove or adapt #2
    4. adding an image
    5. adding an example or case study
  4. Vaughan and Hogg is a secondary resource - useful for pointing to specific utilise academic, peer-reviewed sources - but the chapter should not be based on secondary sources.
  5. For sections which include sub-section include key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings.
  6. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this chapter on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  7. There seems to be reasonable mention of relevant theory, but a lack of planned review of relevant research.
  8. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  9. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  10. Conclusion (the most important section): heading in the right direction - strive to provide concrete, specific, practical take-home messages that demonstrate an excellent understanding of the topic

Figure[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. A figure is presented.
  3. An figure is not presented.
  4. Caption uses APA style.
  5. Caption should include Figure X. ...
  6. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  7. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  8. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text.
  9. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.
  10. Consider increasing image size from default to make it easier to view.

References[edit source]

  1. Insufficient
  2. APA style not used

Resources[edit source]

  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:54, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit source]

Hi, I think you would have more marks if you re-check the marking criteria. There are a few marks that you could easily have. For example, the marking criteria mentioned that "Provide up to about half a dozen wiki links to related Wikiversity book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles". I put the link here for you: Moreover, it is a great way to make your chapter looks good by removing the parts of the template that are not relevant to the topic before you publish the chapter. Hope that would help.--U3195440 (discusscontribs) 20:59, 17 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]