Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Sorrow

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Feedback[edit source]

Hey! I found this Ted Talk / Article on how to deal and cope with sorrow. I hope it gives some helpful insight! https://ideas.ted.com/sorrow-and-tragedy-will-happen-to-us-all-here-are-3-strategies-to-help-you-cope/

Hey! I found this really interesting article about chronic sorrow. It gives a good definition and also compares chronic sorrow to prolonged grief and prolonged depression which may be helpful in your section that highlights the differences between sadness and sorrow. https://search-proquest-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/docview/207665969?rfr_id=info%3Axri%2Fsid%3Aprimo --Taylor Mamukic (discusscontribs) 23:44, 10 October 2020 (UTC)

Hey guys thanks for your comments! These both really assisted and were added to my reference list. --U3202324 (discusscontribs) 05:58, 24 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be:

== Cats and mice ==

rather than

== Cats and Mice ==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:28, 15 September 2020 (UTC)


Topic development feedback[edit source]

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. Summarised with indirect link(s) to evidence.
  2. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Under-developed, 2-level heading structure - develop further
  2. Aim for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclus, with up to a similar number of sub-headings for large sections.
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.

Key points[edit source]

  1. Good development of key points for some sections (e.g., Overview); no development for some other sections (e.g., Conclusion).
  2. Write using 3rd person perspective.
  3. Limited development of theory and research
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.

Image[edit source]

  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. An image (figure) is not presented.
  3. Caption
    1. uses APA style.
    2. does not use APA style.
    3. explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
    4. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text.
  5. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.
  6. Consider increasing image size from default.
  7. Excellent

References[edit source]

  1. OK
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. italicisation
    2. doi formatting
  3. Excellent

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:28, 15 September 2020 (UTC)

Images[edit source]

Hey, I think it would be really interesting

to add a few images into your chapter. I would be super interested to see what kind of relevant images you could find that really add to the information you're delivering! Goodluck :) --taramaland (discuss contribs) 10:00, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

Article suggestion[edit source]

I have found an interesting article about how sorrow, alongside other emotions are crucial to maintaining cognitive balance. http://web.a.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=0&sid=0f49d901-f903-4aae-95ba-b87bf238e188%40sessionmgr4006&bdata=#AN=2014-10687-001&db=pdh --Jackson McNee (discusscontribs) 00:28, 18 October 2020 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter that does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem.
  2. The main area for improvement is that many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags), so the chapter demonstrates insufficient linkage to the best available peer-reviewed academic literature about the topic, especially for 3rd year undergraduate psychology.
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theory is reasonably well explained. Sorrow is considered from several perspectives. A critical perspective is evident.
  2. There are some contradictory descriptions of the relationship between sorrow and sadness. For example, sorrow is described as not as severe as sadness, but then also as more than sadness.

Research[edit source]

  1. Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic.
    2. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  3. Learning features
    1. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles.
    2. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Problematic use of image(s). Uploaded images appear to have been falsely claimed as author's own work. Deletion has been requested.
    4. No use of table(s).
    5. Good use of feature box(es).
    6. Basic use of quiz(zes).
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for many sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2].
    3. Abbreviations
      1. Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
  5. Spelling
    1. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
  6. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    2. Remove unnecessary capitalisation.
    3. Replace double spaces with single spaces.
  7. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
    3. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    4. Direct quotes need page numbers.
    5. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., check and correct capitalisation).
    6. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~17 logged social contributions, almost all after the original due for book chapters (so not much use to the authors) and relatively minor in nature. Most contributions were without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:22, 26 November 2020 (UTC)


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation.
  2. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section.
  2. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  3. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation makes good use of theory.
  5. The presentation makes little to no use of research.
  6. The presentation makes no use of examples or case studies.
  7. The Conclusion only partly fitted within the time limit.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio.
  2. Well paced.
  3. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  4. The visual communication is supplemented by images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The video is basically produced using simple tools.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation (but check and fix the capitalisation) - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  4. Audio recording quality was very good.
  5. Visual display quality was basic.
  6. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either provide details about the image sources and their copyright licenses in the video description or remove the presentation.
  7. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement.
  8. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  9. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  10. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  11. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:32, 26 November 2020 (UTC)