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to add a few images into your chapter. I would be super interested to see what kind of relevant images you could find that really add to the information you're delivering! Goodluck :) --taramaland (discusscontribs) 10:00, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
Overall, this is a promising chapter that does a reasonably good job of applying psychological theory and research to a real-world problem.
The main area for improvement is that many claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags), so the chapter demonstrates insufficient linkage to the best available peer-reviewed academic literature about the topic, especially for 3rd year undergraduate psychology.
Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Use double (not single) quotation marks "to introduce a word or phrase used as an ironic comment, as slang, or as an invented or coined expression; use quotation marks only for the first occurrence of the word or phrase, not for subsequent occurrences" (APA 7th ed., 2020, p. 159).
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
Direct quotes need page numbers.
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Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., check and correct capitalisation).
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~17 logged social contributions, almost all after the original due for book chapters (so not much use to the authors) and relatively minor in nature. Most contributions were without direct links to evidence, so unable to easily verify and assess.