The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.
Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about SDT). Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Expand theory and research in the context of education - there is lots of educational psychology academic work in this area.
Educational application boxes are an excellent idea.
This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.
Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1].
The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
Layout
The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
Learning features
Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
Excellent use of image(s). Brilliant contribution of your own diagrams to illustrate key SDT principles - thankyou
Basic use of table(s) - include APA style table caption.
Very good use of feature box(es).
No use of quiz(zes).
Grammar
Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2].
Abbreviations
Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses.
Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
Figures and tables
Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., check and correct capitalisation).
Citations are not in full APA style. When citing three or more authors in-text there should be no comma after et al. For example, Smith et al. (2020) found ...
References are not in full APA style. For example:
The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's UCLearn site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.
The presentation is easy to follow and interesting to watch and listen to.
The presentation is easy to follow.
The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with narrated audio.
Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
Very good intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech.
The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
