Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Self-determination theory in education

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:57, 19 August 2020 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Excellent - used effectively Description about self provided Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Link provided to book chapter Social contribution Excellent - summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Section headings Good structure. To improve, provide less background content about SDT and more detailed content SDT in education. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Key points Use bullet points (see Tutorial 1 - Using Wikiversity) Overview - Consider adding: an image Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about SDT). Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Expand theory and research in the context of education - there is lots of educational psychology academic work in this area. Educational application boxes are an excellent idea. Image Excellent Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: doi formatting Resources Good Tidied up formatting and casing etc. External links - peer-reviewed articles should be in References

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:09, 20 September 2020 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1]. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of image(s). Brilliant contribution of your own diagrams to illustrate key SDT principles - thankyou Basic use of table(s) - include APA style table caption. Very good use of feature box(es). No use of quiz(zes). Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[2]. Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. Proofreading Replace double spaces with single spaces. APA style In general, do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc.. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures and tables Refer to each Table and Figure using APA style (e.g., check and correct capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style. When citing three or more authors in-text there should be no comma after et al. For example, Smith et al. (2020) found ... References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Include hyperlinked dois with full path. Social contribution ~5 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence Thank-you very much for the high quality image contributions to Wiki Commons.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:55, 14 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. The presentation makes excellent use of theory. The presentation makes good use of research. The presentation makes good use of one or more examples or case studies. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is easy to follow and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation is easy to follow. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Very good intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The video is very well produced. The wording of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter. Audio recording quality was very good. Visual display quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:26, 22 November 2020 (UTC)