Perhaps adding a section to discuss motivation that stems from wanting to benefit/improve the community would be beneficial. It could help flesh out your article in an opposing way from most of your themes while still keeping the collectivist culture point you described!
--U3187741 (discuss • contribs) 12:10, 29 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Great topic. It would be interesting to see examples of successful incorporation of culturally relevant and sensitive approaches in the field of psychology in Aboriginal and Torres Strait Islander communities. Maybe the Australian Indigenous Psychology Association may be able to provide this http:/ /www.indigenouspsychology.com.au/. And what about the need to provide psychological services in Language?--Hill Sarah Louise (discuss • contribs) 01:58, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Great topic and very interesting, however double check you APA formatting. References need to be indented. -- u3201457 --Claireebousfield (discuss • contribs) 15:13, 20 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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Reasonably useful headings, but also room for development. As more specific resources are identified, shaped the heading to focus on less general content and more theory and research actually about the journeys for Indigenous Australians to become psychologists.
Consider rewording "How to motivate Indigenous Australians to become psychologists" to something that better communicates a more intrinsically empowering message. Also consider the limitations of the I-E framework (e.g., it is individualist; can there be socicultural motivation?).
A good job has been done to map mainstream motivation theory to a specific topic. This will be a challenging topic because of a lack of specific theory and research, however work in this area is growing rapidly and it will be important, therefore, where possible, to use and build on existing work by and about Australian Indigenous psychologist training and employment. In that respect, some useful starting points and external links are:
Hello. I hope you don't mind. I made some changes to your 'Why does society need more Indigenous Australian people to become psychologists?' section. There were a lot of repeated words and long sentences.
I like the topic you have chosen. Just in this section, you could talk about less westernised ways of a First Nations person becoming a psychologist. Or perhaps how cultural practises could be absorbed and applied in a First Nations psychology consultation. Thanks, it was a lovely read.
Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem, particularly given the limited existing material in this area.
Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained.
I'm a little wary of the emphasis on extrinsic rather than intrinsic motivation, especially given the colonial/historical use of extrinsic motivators, but use of the I-E taxonomy in the example is excellent.
Perhaps some psychological literature about work motivation and motivation to become a psychologist could be incorporated.
Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
Some clearer statistics about: (a) the gap in mental health; (b) the gap in psychologists between Indigenous- and non-Indigenous Australians would be useful.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section.
An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly.
This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic.
The presentation is well structured.
The presentation is poorly structured.
Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic.
The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/basic/little/no use of theory.
The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/basic/little/no use of research.
The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/basic use of one or more examples or case studies.
The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?
The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
Hi there, I loved your book chapter, however, I think the location of the quiz should be moved to another area. I found the answers were right above the quiz and could defeat the purpose of it. U3185242 (discuss • contribs) 15:38, 6 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]