Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Indigenous Australian psychologist motivation

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Comments[edit source]

Perhaps adding a section to discuss motivation that stems from wanting to benefit/improve the community would be beneficial. It could help flesh out your article in an opposing way from most of your themes while still keeping the collectivist culture point you described! --U3187741 (discusscontribs) 12:10, 29 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestion on content[edit source]

Great topic. It would be interesting to see examples of successful incorporation of culturally relevant and sensitive approaches in the field of psychology in Aboriginal and Torres Strait Islander communities. Maybe the Australian Indigenous Psychology Association may be able to provide this http:/ /www.indigenouspsychology.com.au/. And what about the need to provide psychological services in Language?--Hill Sarah Louise (discusscontribs) 01:58, 30 August 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Great topic and very interesting, however double check you APA formatting. References need to be indented. -- u3201457 --Claireebousfield (discusscontribs) 15:13, 20 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Heading casing[edit source]

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for sentence casing. For example, the wikitext should be:

== Cats and mice ==

rather than

== Cats and Mice ==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:52, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Topic development feedback[edit source]

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Title and sub-title[edit source]

  1. Excellent

User page[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. None summarised with link(s) to evidence.

Section headings[edit source]

  1. Reasonably useful headings, but also room for development. As more specific resources are identified, shaped the heading to focus on less general content and more theory and research actually about the journeys for Indigenous Australians to become psychologists.
  2. Consider rewording "How to motivate Indigenous Australians to become psychologists" to something that better communicates a more intrinsically empowering message. Also consider the limitations of the I-E framework (e.g., it is individualist; can there be socicultural motivation?).
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.

Key points[edit source]

  1. A good job has been done to map mainstream motivation theory to a specific topic. This will be a challenging topic because of a lack of specific theory and research, however work in this area is growing rapidly and it will be important, therefore, where possible, to use and build on existing work by and about Australian Indigenous psychologist training and employment. In that respect, some useful starting points and external links are:
  2. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. a description of the problem and what will be covered
    2. an image
    3. an example or case study
  3. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  6. Direct quotes need page numbers (APA style) - even better, write in your own words.
  7. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. hasn't been developed
    2. what might the take-home, practical messages be?

Image[edit source]

  1. Excellent
  2. An image (figure) is presented.
  3. Caption
    1. uses APA style.
    2. could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.
  5. Consider decreasing image size from default to make it easier to view.

References[edit source]

  1. Needs work in terms of selection and formatting
  2. Shift non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
  3. Go beyond textbook to primary sources
  4. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. doi formatting

Resources[edit source]

  1. See also
    1. Also link to relevant book chapters - e.g., see w:Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Indigenous/Australian
  2. External links
    1. Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:52, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestion[edit source]

Hello. I hope you don't mind. I made some changes to your 'Why does society need more Indigenous Australian people to become psychologists?' section. There were a lot of repeated words and long sentences. I like the topic you have chosen. Just in this section, you could talk about less westernised ways of a First Nations person becoming a psychologist. Or perhaps how cultural practises could be absorbed and applied in a First Nations psychology consultation. Thanks, it was a lovely read.


Chapter review and feedback[edit source]

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem, particularly given the limited existing material in this area.
  1. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.

Theory[edit source]

  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, integrated, and explained.
  2. I'm a little wary of the emphasis on extrinsic rather than intrinsic motivation, especially given the colonial/historical use of extrinsic motivators, but use of the I-E taxonomy in the example is excellent.
  3. Perhaps some psychological literature about work motivation and motivation to become a psychologist could be incorporated.
  4. One or more case studies could be helpful.

Research[edit source]

  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. Some clearer statistics about: (a) the gap in mental health; (b) the gap in psychologists between Indigenous- and non-Indigenous Australians would be useful.
  3. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.

Written expression[edit source]

  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent.
    2. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
    2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
    3. Remove citations from headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Basic of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    2. No use of embedded in-text links to related book chapters. Embedding in-text links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Excellent use of image(s). Ideally, include more Australian Aboriginal culture images.
    4. Basic use of table(s) - APA style caption needed.
    5. Basic use of feature box(es).
    6. Excellent use of quiz(zes).
  4. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent.
  5. APA style
    1. Citations use correct APA style.
    2. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either:
        1. in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or
        2. in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020)
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
      3. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname.
      4. Do not include author initials.
      5. A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al.").
      6. Citations in parentheses should use a comma between the author(s) and year.
      7. Select up to a maximum of three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point).
    3. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.
      3. Include hyperlinked dois.

Social contribution[edit source]

  1. ~1 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:18, 12 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is an excellent/very good/reasonably good/basic presentation.
  2. Overall, this is an insufficient presentation.
  3. Overall, this is an insufficient presentation mainly because it presents too much content visually and auditorily.
  4. This presentation makes creative/effective use of simple tools.
  5. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking and feedback purposes.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. Comments about the book chapter also largely apply to this section.
  2. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  3. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly.
  4. This presentation doesn't adequately address the topic.
  5. The presentation is well structured.
  6. The presentation is poorly structured.
  7. Add and narrate a Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  8. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  9. The selection of content is poor because it doesn't adequately use the most relevant psychological theory and/or research to address the topic.
  10. The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/basic/little/no use of theory.
  11. The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/basic/little/no use of research.
  12. The presentation makes excellent/very good/good/basic use of one or more examples or case studies.
  13. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
  14. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
  15. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives based on the best available psychological theory and research about this topic?
  16. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
  17. The Conclusion did not fit within the time limit.

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation is easy to follow.
  3. The presentation is hard to follow because so much visual and auditory content is presented so quickly.
  4. The presentation makes effective/basic use of animated slides with narrated audio.
  5. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  6. The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio.
  7. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  8. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  9. Excellent/Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  10. Consider improving articulation to enhance the clarity of speech.
  11. The audio communication is hesitant - could benefit from further practice.
  12. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  13. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  14. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
  15. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The usability of the video could be improved by exporting to a commonly used video hosting platform such as YouTube or Vimeo.
  2. The video is very well produced.
  3. The video is well produced using simple tools.
  4. The video is basically produced using simple tools.
  5. Hide the audio icon.
  6. The video is poorly produced and lacks the polish that comes with practice.
  7. The chapter title and sub-title are used in both the name of presentation and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  8. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  9. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  10. The wording and/or formatting/grammar of the title/sub-title is inconsistent between the name of the video, the opening slide, and/or the book chapter.
  11. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  12. The sub-title is missing in both the video title and on the opening slide - this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  13. Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  14. Audio recording quality was excellent/very good/good/a bit quiet - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone.
  15. Visual display quality was excellent/very good/good/basic.
  16. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
  17. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation.
  18. This presentation has probably violated the copyrights of image owners as images appear to have been used without permission and/or acknowledgement.
  19. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  20. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  21. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  22. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter.
  23. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  24. A written description of the presentation is provided.
  25. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:41, 23 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Multimedia feedback

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Overall[edit source]

  1. Overall, this is a basic presentation.

Structure and content[edit source]

  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. The presentation makes some use of theory.
  4. The presentation makes little use of research.
  5. The presentation could be improved by making more use of examples or case studies.
  6. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).

Communication[edit source]

  1. The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio, with some images.
  2. Well paced.
  3. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. But consider using less text per slide.
  5. The visual communication is supplemented by some images.

Production quality[edit source]

  1. The video is basically produced using simple tools.
  2. The chapter title and sub-title are used in the name of the presentation - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  4. Audio recording quality was poor (tinny, low volume, keyboard clicks audible) - probably an on-board microphone was used. Consider using an external microphone.
  5. Visual display quality was basic.
  6. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation.
  7. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  8. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  9. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  10. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:41, 23 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestion for quiz position[edit source]

Hi there, I loved your book chapter, however, I think the location of the quiz should be moved to another area. I found the answers were right above the quiz and could defeat the purpose of it. U3185242 (discusscontribs) 15:38, 6 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]