Some suggestions from a quick look at the early development of this chapter:
Add the title (currently only the sub-title is shown)
Definitions generally don't warrant headings; they can be embedded in sections which provide broader descriptions of the phenomenon which may also include examples, case studies, images etc.
Quiz questions are optional
The most important section is probably missing; it could be called something like "How can gamification enhance educational motivation?" (the sub-title) and directly answer this question which is the main purpose of the article.
I suggest aiming for 3 to 6 top-level headings between the Overview and Conclusion. Consider whether any of these sections warrants the use of sub-headings. If so, use at least 2 sub-headings in those sections.
Aim to provide at 2, preferably 3 or more dot points within each section.
I suggest using Heading type 2 as the top-level heading (currently there is at least one Heading type 1)
Figure 1 looks excellent
Check and correct APA style for references
Add at least one link into each of See also and External links
Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:38, 20 August 2020 (UTC)
I think you could definitely add some information in regards to how gamification can play on the ideas covered in the lecture content on increasing intrinsic motivation in something - specifically building interest in an activity. This also then provides a solution to the problems with extrinsic motivation you already discuss in the chapter. U3202026 (discuss • contribs) 09:24, 28 August 2020 (UTC)
This is a really interesting topic. I suggest within the overview to split the paragraph in half, where you begin to talk about the content of the chapter. There also doesn't seem to be a lot of links within the chapter, so this could be something to add. For example a link to wikipedia pages about particular concepts (e.g. intrinsic and extrinsic motivation) would allow the reader to have further avenues to look into. Using a case study to demonstrate intrinsic and extrinsic motivation and gamification or the motivation theories, could also be helpful for a reader. Instead an interesting idea would be to create a 'pretty box' and suggest an example for the application of the theory. For example make up a game that can be used in the educational setting as a guide for what could be done. --U3187381 (discuss • contribs) 09:50, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
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Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations.
Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
Ideally, provide more direct coverage of motivational theory underlying gamification in educational contexts.
Overview - Consider adding:
a case study.
Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
Consider including more examples/case studies.
Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed.
Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent in places, but problematic in other places.
Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence.